Beyond - Legends Soldier - a love poem of sorts. Jag.

Happy Valentine's Day everyone.

 

Any more poetry-reading Jag fans out there?

 

Any more poetry-reading Jag fans out there?

Why, yes there are!

Hi, Tahi. I loved this poem - its the first of your poems I've read, but it won't be the last.

Like many others, I think you captured Jag's character very well. Your phrasing and choice of words is lovely. Some of my favorite things:

That's what he does like about home.
The words stay in their place -
no sudden urges to sidle away.
No surprises really.

That's the orignal, grim, Chiss-Jag!

. . . the throbbing tattoo
of his heartbeat
when he sees her or
when she walks near;

as the whisper
of his breath
against her hair

Jag with the layers peeled back - the Jag all his 'shippers love.

The microcosm he calls
us - Jaina and Jag -
has become as familiar
to him as home.

Jag reconciling the different parts of this life. Full circle, at least to this point.

I also like the recurring "home" theme. Home can be so many things...

Great job! I'm glad you "upped" so that I found this!

ojn

 

Nice job!

 

oldjedinurse

Lovely to meet you - and thanks for reading. Always nice to meet a fellow poetry-lover.

Like many others, I think you captured Jag's character very well. Your phrasing and choice of words is lovely.
awww - thanks.

That's the orignal, grim, Chiss-Jag!
LOL I like that nickname.

Jag with the layers peeled back - the Jag all his 'shippers love.
Yep - he's quite an interesting character. I know quite a few guys who are like this, so it's a recognisable "type". There's a lot going on underneath, but it doesn't make it to the surface very often.

I also like the recurring "home" theme. Home can be so many things...
Yes it can, both good and bad . . . but always familiar.

Thanks again.

FelsGoddess

Great to meet another new face. Thanks.

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Have a nice weekend everyone.

 

Jag needs a boost. LOL

 

Beautiful! I love your poetry!

 

Tahi, I'm such a fan! Your poems are a pleasure to read. You captured Jag beautifully, and the relationship between he and Jaina was wonderfully evoked. I loved this section:

But that's all right because war is
as natural to him as . . .

. . . the throbbing tattoo
of his heartbeat
when he sees her or
when she walks near;

as the whisper
of his breath
against her hair
when he takes her
in his arms.

So sweet! The way you linked that with the first line of the poem was excellent. Fantastic work!

 

This deserves another reply/up because it is about Jag, it is poetry, and it is marvelously written.

 

Hi again jedi_of_ennth and thanks for reading. And thanks also for the kind words.

Hi K_A. Aww - thanks. Yes, that last bit kind of wrote itself. Poems are like that sometimes - they kind of take over.

Hi to you, too, CrazyRodian. Good to see you again. i guess you're busy with studies and exams at present. Good luck.

Ah - you like Jag? An interesting guy.

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If any of you are interested - I posted an Obi-Wan poem a few days ago in The Saga. The link is below in my sig.

 

I have always hated Jag but that was absolutely FABULOUS. You my friend, are an awesome poet. !Gabby!

 

Hi jade_saber8000.
Awww - thanks. I'm not a great fan of Jag, but he is quite interesting. And writing the poem has made me a bit more sympathetic towards him. I can relate his character type to some of the men I know, which helps.

 

The microcosm he calls
us - Jaina and Jag -
has become as familiar
to him as home. Home

aww.. so great


Tahi another great one

you captured Jag well, a loving soldier


~Mags~

 

I'm not a Jaina/ Jag fan (in fact I doubt if I'm any ship at all anymore) but I love this poem. It's very intense, every clear in emotions. The last bit "but he's trying" is very strong.

Well done once again!

 

That's what he is, Mags. Thanks so much for reading.

Elfsheen
Thanks for those comments. Really appreciated. I'm glad it is clear because that's always my worry with poems - that the images might get a bit muddied by the wrong structure. So thanks.

My own favourite poets are the ones who write in very clear images and quite spare language. People like Brian Turner and Seamus Heaney.

 

Thanks for nominating this poem in the SFFA, guys. It's through to the voting round.