Saga - OT "Sunrider" (Rebellion Era, all new OCs, short story)

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A catchy beginning and interesting first chapter. Lissa's determined personality really shines through in that last line---she is turning out to be quite an interesting character even from the start with this injustice. Looking forward to more!

 

I like Lissa. I also like how it is implied that she knows (and perhaps is even friends with) Luke Skywalker.

 

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Wow, that was intense. Adrenaline fueled badassery for the win.

 

@Kurisan !!!!!!!!!! I like Lissa and her Papa already: their struggles, caught between that slimy Fortuna and Jabba and those snooty arrogant Imps!!!! They really had no recourse... I worry about Lissa - she's strong and fierce when cornered but it would be so easy for her to fall into hostile hands.

 

You are good at creating women who take destiny into their own hands. Well, done!

 

Brave Lissa--but for such bravery comes consequences. Now her journey really begins....

 

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Wow, that sure got their attention! And Lok's too, I'll bet.

 

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“I just killed four Imperial storm troopers, and I need to get off the planet before the Empire finds me…”

Jolly good decision. Run, girl, run.

 

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Fascinating developments. I can totally understand Lissa's reluctance: I'm trying to get away from the Imperials, not go back to where they're at, the same ones more than likely, i.e., part of the same group so they know who they're to keep an eye out for.

 

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Somehow I get the impression our flyboy has daddy issues.....

 

Sten let something vital slip, totally unintentionally. Lissa certainly has no love of the Empire; she could do worse than fall in with a strong Rebel cell.

 

Very cool western you have going on here. Sten’s kind of a mercenary but apparently on his own, freelancing with just the faintest of connections to society. It seems he kinda longs to have someone who matters to him. Lissa is another tough, free spirit. I can see them being partners; not really romantically but as allies. This reminds me a bit of True Grit.

It appears that Sten is following hunches and really doesn’t know what he’s after, more of an “I’ll know it when I see it” kind of thing. It’s really interesting to see this parallel the escape of C-3PO and R2. Makes me wonder if another young 19 year old moisture farmer will appear soon!

Loving the details, like how Lissa has to show him how to hold the macro binoculars so that the light doesn’t reflect off the metal parts. Excellent story and vivid characterizations! I can almost hear the soundtrack.

 

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Awesome as they find clues relating to the escape pod and 2 droids.

 

I think we know what droids they're looking for.

 

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Excellent rescue by Lissa, whose warnings were definitely on the mark. Now they have more planning to do. Get out of harm's way since they know all they're going to.

 

They're getting closer! Lissa is a very accomplished scout and tracker. Sten is lucky to have her with him. Darn fool, waving his glowstick around. Might as well have sent the Sand People an invitation. Lissa is going to be invaluable to him here. He better reward her - the girl's not working for free.

 

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