If you're ever looking for a good laugh, you could do worse than write out Star Wars lines. "wretched hive of scum and villainy" is a classic, along with the more recent "perhaps if by merely your presence, the mystery surrounding this threat will be revealed...now if you will excuse me, I will retire." SW dialogue is an anomaly in that, it sounds as naturally conversational as a technical manual, but then it is in keeping with the tone of the old "swashbuckling adventures" (--Mr. Samuel L. Jackson), which Lucas has always intended to emulate and pay homage to. In the films, there's more room for forgiveness as you don't have the offending statement staring you in the face, but all that we have as fanfic writers are words. Words are obviously our lifeblood, and we are wholly dependent on them. Frankly, the ludicrousness of Star Wars dialogue really takes away from a story. It shouldn't, I guess, because the writer is retaining an essential component of the source material...but it does. Maybe I'm on my own with this, but nothing ruins a potentially good story for me quicker than bad dialogue, and SW is rife with it. This raises the question; should the atrocious dialogue remain--because it's a SW tradition--or should writers put a more natural, believable flair to their conversations in order to make them seem credible, and not subtract from the flow of the piece? I'm all for revisions to phrasing, pace, and diction, to a reasonable extent of course. I'm not going to Tarantinoize the SW universe. I'd be very interested in seeing the community weigh in on this, so feel free to come out swinging. -Mr Black Please refrain from using swear words that have been specifically forbidden on the boards. Please see the [link=http://boards.theforce.net/tos.asp]TOS[/link] and the Fanfic FAQ. Thank you.