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Saga "The flower that blooms in adversity is the most rare and beautiful of them all.”(minigamechallenge)

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction- Before, Saga, and Beyond' started by teamhansolo, Mar 28, 2020.

  1. teamhansolo

    teamhansolo Jedi Master star 4

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    Jun 25, 2018
    Mulan Quote Challenge (started by @devilinthedetails)
    #5



    The young girl huddled as far into the corner of the dark, confined, claustrophobic hole as she could; shrinking away from the unbearable darkness, from the void of nothingness that made this miniscule hiding place seem teeming with monsters and nightmares. Small sweaty hands were pressed tightly to her ringing ears, but her head still throbbed with gunshots and screams. Images of death burned the insides of her eyelids, leaving her breathless. Abruptly struck with the harsh reality of her utter and complete desolation, a cold, and unnervingly empty silence filled her soul. It kidnapped her starry eyed spirit and chained it down, leaving in its dreadful wake an unwanted orphan; broken, yet hell-bent on survival. Jyn Erso.
     
  2. WarmNyota_SweetAyesha

    WarmNyota_SweetAyesha Chosen One star 7

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    Superb and gripping use of the lovely quote, showing how a life-changing moment forged Jyn into a fierce survivor and into someone who felt shattered on the inside [face_thinking] =D=
     
    Last edited: Mar 29, 2020
  3. AzureAngel2

    AzureAngel2 Force Ghost star 6

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    Jun 14, 2005
    Indeed very gripping and intriguing. And most important, it´s a Jyn Erso story! Hurrah to that!
     
  4. devilinthedetails

    devilinthedetails WIP Month Champion star 5 VIP - Game Winner

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    A powerful, profound take on one of the most important father/daughter relationships in Star Wars. Wonderful use of the prompt. Thank you for writing for the Mulan Challenge!
     
  5. teamhansolo

    teamhansolo Jedi Master star 4

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    Thank You all so much!! [:D]
    I don't write too much so your comments mean a lot! :)
     
  6. mavjade

    mavjade It's so FLUFFY! Fanfic Manager star 6 Staff Member Manager

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    A powerful story that goes to show you don't need a ton of words to make something beautiful and impactful! =D=

    Great job!

    One quick thing, when you are doing a challenge, it's usually best to put what your prompt was in the post (so in this case, your quote). If you won't want people to know before they read the story, you can put it at the bottom or under a spoiler tag.
     
    Last edited: Mar 30, 2020
  7. Blue_Aether

    Blue_Aether Jedi Grand Master star 4

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    Oct 1, 2019
    AHHHH it’s so good! I really liked it! :D
     
  8. Mira_Jade

    Mira_Jade The Fanfic Manager With The Cape star 5 Staff Member Manager

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    Wow, but this really was proof that you don't need many words to write something poignant and heavy hitting, I agree with what every other commenter has said! Because Jyn really is a flower that blooms in adversity, and her 'starry eyed spirit' will return again. Beautiful job with this! Thanks for sharing! =D=