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Saga - PT Before the Saga The Negotiator (Obi-Wan Fanfiction Summer Olympics Thread)

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  1. devilinthedetails

    devilinthedetails WIP Month Champion star 5 VIP - Game Winner

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    Title: The Negotiator

    Author: devilinthedetails

    Genre: A variety.

    Characters: Obi-Wan Kenobi; Qui-Gon Jinn.

    Summary: A compilation of stories written for the Fanfiction Summer Olympics focusing on Obi-Wan Kenobi. An index of entries is found below.

    Index:

    Stuck in the Present. 110 Word Hurdle. Obi-Wan Kenobi and Qui-Gon Jinn. General; Friendship. Post #2.

    Tragic Irony. Single Sentence Shotput. Obi-Wan Kenobi and Anakin Skywalker. General; Angst; Drama. Post #5.

    Peace and Wisdom. 400 Word Cross Country. Obi-Wan Kenobi and Qui-Gon Jinn. General; Friendship. Post #7.

    Hope is Lightest When It's Darkest. Prime Time Coverage. Obi-Wan Kenobi and Anakin Skywalker. Post #13.

    Blinding Light. Fantastical Fencing. Obi-Wan Kenobi and Qui-Gon Jinn. Post #16.
     
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  2. devilinthedetails

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    Title: Stuck in the Present

    Genre: General; Friendship

    Characters: Obi-Wan Kenobi; Qui-Gon Jinn.

    Event: 110 Word Hurdle

    Summary: Obi-Wan is stuck in the present though he remembers the past.

    Stuck in the Present

    He’d become a Master on the Council before he turned forty. Respected by Yoda and Mace Windu for his wisdom though he never thought of himself as wise. Praised for his patience, although he could remember being an impatient Padawan—eager to race through the stages of his life from Padawan to Knight to Master. His Master had tried to make him slow down—urged him to appreciate the space in between progressions—but he with the obstinacy and ambition of youth ignored this advice. Now he only wished he could be a Padawan again, but even a Jedi Master couldn’t turn back time and was stuck in the present.
     
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  3. WarmNyota_SweetAyesha

    WarmNyota_SweetAyesha Chosen One star 7

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    Wonderful introspection and I can well imagine Obi-Wan wishes he could return to the innocence and "ease" of being a Padawan, particularly with Jinn. :) @};-
     
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  4. Mira_Jade

    Mira_Jade The Fanfic Manager With The Cape star 5 Staff Member Manager

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    This was a great glimpse of introspection, and a fantastic way to open up this collection! It's true; Obi-Wan really is known and respected for all of the things he struggled with - and Qui-Gon patiently strove to teach him - as a Padawan. Of course he wants to go back in time and tell Qui-Gon as much, and it's painful that he can't. Yet, in his own way, Qui-Gon knew then, and still knows even now. [face_love]

    Gorgeous work with this! I can't wait to read more. :D
     
  5. devilinthedetails

    devilinthedetails WIP Month Champion star 5 VIP - Game Winner

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    @WarmNyota_SweetAyesha Thank you so much for commenting!:) The length of the 110 Word Hurdle has so far invited me to become introspective with my characters. I'm so glad that you felt this was a wonderful bit of introspection and that you could imagine Obi-Wan looking back with longing on the innocence and "ease" of being a Padawan. It sometimes seems in life that when we are young, we want desperately to be older, and when we start getting older, we wish to be young again...Some more introspection might be ahead for Obi-Wan in this Pentathlon, so I hope you'll continue to enjoy it!

    @Mira_Jade Thank you so much for commenting!:) I'm so flattered that you found this to be a great glimpse of introspection and a fantastic way to open this collection. I hope you'll continue to enjoy where this collection goes next. One of my favorite aspects of Obi-Wan's character arc in the Prequels is that we can see how he develops from someone who struggles with impatience in TPM to pretty much the Master of patience in ROTS. So you're right that I could imagine that he'd want to tell Qui-Gon about how much he has grown, but, of course, Qui-Gon is in a sense able to see how much Obi-Wan has grown and always did see that potential in Obi-Wan. So this piece was very poignant and nostalgic for me to write. I hope you'll enjoy where the Pentathlon goes next!




    Title: Tragic Irony

    Genre: General; Angst; Drama

    Characters: Obi-Wan Kenobi; Anakin Skywalker

    Event: Single Sentence Shotput

    Summary: Obi-Wan mourns Anakin's fall to the Dark Side.

    Tragic Irony

    Obi-Wan was known as the Negotiator, but he couldn’t negotiate Anakin—his best friend and brother—back from the Dark Side, and the tragic irony of that broke something inside him.
     
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  6. WarmNyota_SweetAyesha

    WarmNyota_SweetAyesha Chosen One star 7

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    A "tragic irony" indeed. :( =D= Although Anakin's fall was part choice and part manipulation, I can understand Kenobi's sense of responsibility--thinking if only, at the very least, if only they'd seen the warning signs of a Sithly scheme. [face_thinking]
     
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  7. devilinthedetails

    devilinthedetails WIP Month Champion star 5 VIP - Game Winner

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    @WarmNyota_SweetAyesha Thank you so much for commenting:) My heart broke for him as I wrote about him observing this tragic irony. I agree that Anakin's fall was part Anakin's own choice and part manipulation by the cunning Palpatine, but I can understand how Obi-Wan would blame himself and feel a sense of guilt and responsibility even though in my opinion he is not at fault for Anakin's downfall. I think it's natural that he would feel regret and think of how if only he could somehow have saved Anakin=(( But this story will be a more peaceful one for Obi-Wan to make up for the heartbreak of last one, I promise.




    Title: Peace and Wisdom

    Genre: General; Friendship

    Characters: Obi-Wan Kenobi; Qui-Gon Jinn

    Event: 400 Word Cross-Country

    Summary: Obi-Wan and Qui-Gon meditate on the Jedi Code in the Room of a Thousand Fountains.

    Peace and Wisdom

    Obi-Wan sat cross-legged and close-eyed with fingers folded together over his knees, meditating as he’d been taught since childhood. He was perched on a large, moss-covered stone. Behind him, one of the Room of a Thousand Fountains’ many waterfalls cascaded down rocks into a rippling pool, misting him as it descended.

    Beside him, he could hear his Master’s breathing and heart beating in unison with his.

    He was contemplating the Code as he often did during meditative sessions. That prompted him to ask Qui-Gon, “Master, what do you think is the most important part of being a Jedi?”

    Obi-Wan expected his Master to reply with something about serving the galaxy or being in tune with the Living Force, two of his most common instructional refrains. Instead he turned the question back on Obi-Wan. “What I think doesn’t matter. What do you most want as a Jedi?”

    Remembering a verse from the Code he’d recited since he could string a sentence together—there is no emotion; there is peace—and reflecting that he most wanted to feel that calm sensation of being in harmony with everyone and everything in the universe, he replied simply, “Peace.”

    That one word seemed too small and humble to encapsulate all his ambitions and aspirations. He recalled another passage he’d memorized years ago: there is no ignorance; there is knowledge. That single declaration summed up the long hours he spent reading holobooks and listening to his Master and Yoda, trying to gain wisdom that could only come from experience he didn’t yet have.

    With this whirling in his mind, he added, “Wisdom too, Master.”

    “Which do you want most?” Qui-Gon pressed gently.

    “Can’t it be both?” Obi-Wan’s forehead furrowed.

    “No.” Qui-Gon chuckled softly, and Obi-Wan could feel his mentor’s amusement in the Force. “You can only want one thing most. You can’t have clarity of thought and purpose otherwise.”

    Through the Living Force to which Qui-Gon was always urging him to become more connected, Obi-Wan attuned himself to the waterfall’s lulling music. Serenity flooded him like a river, and he said, “I want peace most, Master.”

    “Very wise indeed.” Qui-Gon was smiling—Obi-Wan didn’t have to open his eyes to see that since he could hear it in his Master’s tone. “Maybe you can have both after all, my young apprentice.”
     
  8. WarmNyota_SweetAyesha

    WarmNyota_SweetAyesha Chosen One star 7

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    Excellent, I can definitely understand why he would want both, and yet settle on peace/serenity. The setting also inspires that tranquil mood. :)
     
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  9. devilinthedetails

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    @WarmNyota_SweetAyesha Thank you so much for commenting!:) Like you, I can definitely understand why Obi-Wan would want both wisdom and peace, since those tend to be the two things I want the most, but then when he has to choose picking peace, since admittedly that is what I would do as well. So I'm so glad that you felt you could understand Obi-Wan's thought process with regard to that. I was really hoping that the setting of the Room of a Thousand Fountains, which always sounds like such a beautiful, calming place, would add to that air of tranquility in the piece, so I'm so happy to hear that was the case for you!
     
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  10. Da'niel

    Da'niel Jedi Youngling

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    Excellent scene :) Turning the choice back around at the very end ("Maybe you can have both after all") is a classic Jedi move. You have a good ear for Qui-Gon.
     
  11. devilinthedetails

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    @Da'niel Thank you so much for commenting!:D I'm so flattered that you found this scene to be an excellent one, and I always love those sort of Jedi mind tricks and twists like "Maybe you can have both after all" so I couldn't resist including one in this story, and I'm so happy that you enjoyed it. Qui-Gon is one of my absolute favorite Star Wars characters and I always want to do him justice, so it makes me so happy that you felt I had a good ear for him.
     
  12. JediMaster_Jen

    JediMaster_Jen Jedi Grand Master star 4

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    Stuck in the Present: Nice look at the small circle of life; wishing to grow and achieve until all that's left is the desire to return to our youth when life was much more simple. =D= I can well imagine Obi-Wan wishing for that.

    Tragic Irony: You manage to convey so much in that single sentence regarding Obi-Wan feelings about Anakin's fall. Well done!^:)^

    Peace and Wisdom: Lovely, peaceful scene. :) Such a wonderful setting for such reflections.
     
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  13. devilinthedetails

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    @JediMaster_Jen Thank you so much for commenting, and apologies for the delayed response:) I'm so glad that you found "Stuck in the Present" to be a nice look at the small circle of life. I find one of the strange ironies of life to be how when one is young, there is the burning desire to grow and achieve, and then when one is grown up, one experiences such a longing to return to the simpler days of one's youth. So I could imagine Obi-Wan wishing for that especially since such a wish could also connect to how he misses Qui-Gon's presence and wisdom in his life. So it's nice to hear that story resonated with you.

    I really think that Obi-Wan must have felt so many overwhelming, heart-breaking emotions at Anakin's fall, and it was daunting to try to capture them, especially in one single sentence, but I'm so happy that you felt "Tragic Irony" manage to do that so well.

    "Peace and Wisdom" was a marvelously tranquil piece for me to write so I'm so glad you found it so lovely and peaceful. I've always loved the setting of the Room of a Thousand Fountains so it seemed the perfect spot to set such a reflective piece!




    Title: Hope is Lightest When It's Darkest

    Genre: General; Adventure; Friendship.

    Characters: Obi-Wan Kenobi; Anakin Skywalker.

    Event: Prime Time Coverage

    Summary: Obi-Wan and Anakin guide refugees through a mountain cavern. Author's Note: Some inspiration for the plot taken from an episode of Avatar: the Last Airbender.

    Hope is Lightest When It’s Darkest

    From space, the Angura Obi-Wan had seen was a breathtakingly beautiful landscape defined by jagged coastal cliffs that bordered blue seas, rivers that cut through deep gorges carved from red clay, long plateaus, green forests, and high mountains. On the surface, this stunning terrain was marred—trees burned, cliff were scoured by blaster fire, and mountain passes caved in under artillery fire—by the frequent civil wars that scarred the people and the land.

    Angura was home to a hundred tribes with as many different, competing traditions. The latest conflict had broken out between the Celik and the Duru tribes who fought over the once rich, now blighted farmland at the foot of the ragged Burak mountain range. It wasn’t Obi-Wan’s mission to resolve the violent dispute between the Celik and Duru tribes. Neither the Celik, the Duru, nor the chronically ineffectual, perpetually beleaguered central government had requested Jedi intervention, and all three groups were likely to act with equal hostility if the Jedi were discovered interfering on Angura.

    The Council had made that clear when they had dispatched Obi-Wan and his Padawan to the planet. The request for aid had come from a desperate band of refugees seeking a way off world. Obi-Wan and Anakin were to be that way off world, escorting the refugees to a hidden ship and flying them to Coruscant, where a myriad of organizations would attend to their housing and employment needs.

    The ship—flown in by Anakin under a cloaking device to conceal their arrival from Celik and Duru tracking equipment—had needed to be hidden on the far side of the Burak mountains to reduce the risk of it being noticed while refugees were brought to it.

    That meant, as Obi-Wan and Anakin were explaining to the mass of refugees—a motley mix of people who had once been Celik and Duru but now considered themselves neither—that they would have to either go over or around the Burak mountains. To go over would be to brave harsh elements with meager supplies and to chance being crushed in the avalanches unleashed by artillery fire. To go around would be to gamble with running into Celik and Duru patrols and to take longer with a group already on the cusp of exhaustion. Neither scenario was particularly ideal.

    “If the Jedi will pardon me.” Zeki, one of the males who seemed to occupy an esteemed position of unofficial leadership among the refugees, raised a shriveled hand. “We have talked only of going over or around the mountains, but not of going through them.”

    “Going through them?” repeated Obi-Wan, arching an eyebrow.

    “I was a tribe storyteller—an expert in the legends, myths, and old languages of my people—before the war displaced me.” Zeki’s gaze traveled across the crowd. “One old legend tells of a cavern that provides a natural passageway through the Burak mountains. The cavern was discovered centuries ago by two lovers from warring tribes who used it to meet secretly.”

    “It could be dangerous placing our trust in ancient legends,” Obi-Wan muttered to Anakin, stroking his beard.

    “It might be better than the alternatives, Master.” Anakin shrugged. “Going over and going around don’t seem like great options to me. Maybe going through will work better like the old-timer says. What’s the worst that can happen if he is wrong? We’ll just have to backtrack a little.”

    “We’ll lose time, energy, and supplies, all of which are vital and in low supply, if we have to backtrack,” Obi-Wan pointed out tartly, irked by how flippant his teenage apprentice could be about important mission matters.

    “Yes, Master.” Anakin didn’t sound particularly chastened. “I think it’s worth a shot, anyway. That’s all I’m saying.”

    “All legends grow out of a seed of truth.” Obi-Wan pinched the bridge of his nose, recalling that Qui-Gon had once made an observation to that effect. Yielding to his Master’s wisdom as always, Obi-Wan raised his voice to be audible across the entire assembly as he asked Zeki, “Do you know where legend states this passage is to be located and can you lead us there?”

    Zeki answered yes to both questions, which was how their ragtag assortment of refugees had come to enter a dark cavern beneath the Burak mountains. The cavern had many twists and turns—it was not a straightforward path—and their glowrod could run out without careful rationing. Sharp stalactites hung from the stone ceiling, reminding Obi-Wan of the razor claws of predators swallowing hapless prey foolish enough to climb into the gaping monster’s maw.

    He was regretting ever taking the refugees who had entrusted him with their safety into this place of bewildering blackness when the sickly yellow light of his glowrod illuminated a faded ink script on the cave wall. He couldn’t read or recognize the language the script was written in, but still knew somehow that it was a language.

    “Zeki.” He beckoned the old storyteller forward and gestured to the ancient script on the wall. “Can you read this to us?”

    “It’s old Duru.” Zeki brushed a reverent finger over the cavern wall, softly tracing the stone beneath the script. “It says that ‘hope is lightest when it’s darkest.’”

    Obi-Wan scowled. He had been wishing for some more straightforward guidance—such as turn left at the next corner and find another sign there—rather than this cryptic riddle.

    “Hope is lightest when it’s darkest.” Anakin echoed the words, his gaze blue against the blackness that threatened to swallow them when their glowrods burned into nothingness. He seemed to puzzle over the riddle’s phrasing for a moment before exclaiming with an almost triumphant air, “Switch off your glowrods.”

    The skeptical refugees didn’t appear overwhelmingly eager to comply with this injunction, and Obi-Wan couldn’t fault them for their dubiousness at this point. The Jedi had led them into this dark place where they risked getting lost forever, after all.

    Unfazed by this ignoring of his orders, Anakin switched off his own glowrod. The stalactites above him glimmered an icy blue.

    “The stalactites.” Anakin grinned as the glowrods around him flickered out. “They’ll light our way out of the cavern if we turn off our glowrods.”

    The icy blue stalactites did indeed seem to be marking a pathway out of the cavern for reasons that Obi-Wan couldn’t understand, but he could comprehend so little about this underground place that he tried not to allow that to trouble him.

    “Not a bad deduction,” he commented to Anakin as they resumed their journey through the cavern. The wry remarks, the dry jokes, the sarcasm. That was how he had shown his affection to Qui-Gon, and now how he showed it to Anakin.

    “That means it was a very good deduction.” Anakin’s wide smile had more than a hint of smugness to it, and Obi-Wan snorted.
     
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  14. WarmNyota_SweetAyesha

    WarmNyota_SweetAyesha Chosen One star 7

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    Super description of the lovely world as it appears in space contrasted with the ravages that become apparent on the surface.

    Fascinating about the legend and the "cryptic" riddle that does indeed lead them safely out of the cavern. Going through, as Anakin pointed out, was preferable to going over and around. :p
    "Wry jokes and dry remarks" is definitely a hallmark of the relationship between Jinn and Kenobi and now between Obi-Wan and Anakin. :)
     
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  15. JediMaster_Jen

    JediMaster_Jen Jedi Grand Master star 4

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    I love stories that are so detailed and in-depth that I can picture in my mind's eye everything that is happening. This achieves that spectacularly. Very well done. =D= Enjoying this immensely.
     
  16. devilinthedetails

    devilinthedetails WIP Month Champion star 5 VIP - Game Winner

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    @WarmNyota_SweetAyesha As always, thank you so much for commenting!:) I really did want to make the world seem very lovely form space to contrast all the more starkly with the ravages of war and conflict all too apparent on the surface, so I'm so happy that came across to you in an effective way. I really enjoyed writing about the legends and cryptic riddle that does indeed lead them all to a place of safety in the end so I'm so glad that was a highlight for you, and I abolsutely agree that wry jokes and dry remarks are the hallmark of both Obi-Wan's relationship with Qui-Gon and with Anakin, and the common element both times is Obi-Wan. So I blame all the sarcasm on Obi-Wan[face_laugh]

    @JediMaster_Jen Thank you so much for commenting!:) I'm so flattered that you felt this story was so detailed and in depth that you could picture everything that was happening in your mind's eye. I don't think there could be a greater compliment to a writer than that![face_blush] Thank you so much, and I'm so glad that you're enjoying this set of stories.




    Author's Note: Sorry for taking so long to post this one. I'd been wanting to write this sort of piece for a long time but could never be satisfied with what I produced since there was so much emotion I wanted to express. Hopefully this humble effort will succeed at being moving in some way to readers.

    Title: Blinding Light

    Genre: Angst; Hurt/Comfort; General.

    Characters: Obi-Wan Kenobi; Qui-Gon Jinn.

    Event: Fantastical Fencing

    Summary: After Anakin's fall, as an exile, Obi-Wan finds some comfort in Qui-Gon's wisdom.

    Blinding Light

    Obi-Wan stood staring out at the shifting sand dunes of Tatooine. The twin suns blazed overhead, their harsh luminescence reflected and refracted in the red sand, forcing Obi-Wan to squint against the relentless sunlight. Before he had exiled himself to Tatooine, Obi-Wan had never experienced such pervasive, merciless light. His time on Tatooine had compelled him to confront what blinding light truly meant.

    He could have escaped from the cruel sunlight, seeking the shadowing, cooling refuge of his hermit’s hut, but he felt that he had to stare into the blinding light. Staring into the blinding light was how he faced his guilt and grief over Anakin’s fall to the Dark Side. The abiding, endless sorrow that the boy he had loved and trained had chosen to become a monster. The fathomless depths of his remorse that he hadn’t killed Anakin on Mustafar, but only transformed him into a maimed beast that lashed out with ever more fury and hatred. The nagging sense that he was failing the galaxy even as he sought to guard one of the twins who could be its greatest hope.

    He felt alone in his guilt and his grief—but didn’t all exiles feel alone? Wasn’t that what it meant to be in exile?—and he wondered if this was how Anakin had felt before his fall to the Dark Side. Swallowed by isolation, trapped in guilt and grief, and blinded by the light.

    He wished Qui-Gon would come to him so he wouldn’t feel so terribly, achingly alone.

    As if the thought had summoned him, Obi-Wan felt Qui-Gon’s presence beside him, invisible but palpable in his heart, mind, and soul. Death might have separated them, but through the transcendent Force they could communicate as if speaking through a veil.

    “You’re here.” Obi-Wan hoped that inadequate-sounding comment could somehow convey to Qui-Gon how much he had missed him every minute since that duel with the Sith on Naboo.

    “You’re feeling guilt and grief over Anakin’s fall.” Qui-Gon’s tone was gentle—gentle as the fingers that had brushed Obi-Wan’s cheek as he became one with the Force—but Obi-Wan had to blink back tears at the words. “You provided him with the best training and guidance that you could, but you couldn’t make his choices for him. He was an adult responsible for his own choices, and he chose to leave the Jedi.”

    Obi-Wan could hear the echo of his own advice to Anakin ringing in his ears. After Ahsoka left the Jedi, Anakin had confided in him, and, at the time, Obi-Wan hadn’t seen what a blaring holosign of warning it was—that Anakin was confiding in him because he had no other friends among the Jedi, no other Jedi whom he trusted and respected, in the Order after Ahsoka was gone.

    He had offered all the proper Jedi platitudes encouraging detachment and acceptance even though he would miss Ahsoka’s vivacious presence among the Jedi almost as keenly as Anakin. He had told Anakin that you could care about a Padawan deeply and sincerely strive to guide them on the Jedi path, but you couldn’t make their choices for them. At a certain point, you had to step back and allow your Padawan the freedom to determine their own destiny even if that destiny took them down a different path than being a Jedi. You had to accept and respect their choice. To seek to control or deny it would be an impulse more rooted in the Dark than the Light.

    When he had said those words, it had felt like there were rocks in his mouth. At the time, he had thought they had been hard words to say. Now he realized that saying them had been infinitely easier than believing them when his own Padawan’s path had led away from the Jedi and to the Sith.

    “I should’ve guided him better.” Obi-Wan’s throat felt dry as the desert wind. “I was too strict with him sometimes.”

    He recalled how quick he had been to critique a teenage Anakin. How swift he had been to emphasize and correct any imperfection he saw in Anakin. How adamant and unbending he had been about enforcing the rules. After Geonosis, after Anakin’s mother died, after the Clone Wars began, he had tried to ease up—to become more patient and softer in how he dealt Anakin, but had irreparable damage to his relationship with Anakin been done before that? He couldn’t know. He’d never know because it was impossible to know.

    “If you had been less strict with him, you’d be wishing now that you’d been more stern with him.” Qui-Gon’s answer sounded like a sigh in Obi-Wan’s head. “You never win and always lose when you second-guess yourself, Obi-Wan.”

    “I should’ve made it clearer that I cared about him.” Obi-Wan wasn’t ready to stop blaming himself yet. “I’m always too sarcastic with people I care about.”

    He was and he didn’t know why unless it was because he was too much of a coward to acknowledge the depths of his own caring.

    “He knew you cared about him.” Qui-Gon was firm as a cliff face. “He chose to throw away that caring as if it were nothing.”

    That was a truth as harsh as the blinding light of Tatooine’s twin suns, and Obi-Wan wanted to flinch from it but found he couldn’t.

    “Grief and guilt distort our perception of reality, and, although they may tempt us into believing they are the truth, they are not the truth,” Qui-Gon went on when Obi-Wan was too stunned by this revelation to speak. “The truth is the Light, and grief and guilt are not of the Light. They are of the Dark. They are the shadows of possession and anger at ourselves or others.”

    “What should I feel to be in the Light then, Master?” Obi-Wan had been in the darkness of grief and guilt for so long that it seemed impossible to find a path back to a place unshadowed by those emotions.

    “Forgiveness and compassion for yourself and for others.” Qui-Gon’s wisdom was a light inside Obi-Wan now, guiding him to a brighter future of acceptance.

    “Do I deserve forgiveness and compassion after all my failures?” Obi-Wan’s question emerged in a strangled whisper.

    “You haven’t failed so much as you think because you are always too hard on yourself.” There was wry affection in Qui-Gon’s reply. “I think you deserve forgiveness and compassion more than most.”

    And because Qui-Gon, who had made him promise to train Anakin so many years ago, believed that, he tried to convince himself to believe that as well. The first step in forgiving himself would have to be thinking that he deserved forgiveness.
     
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  17. WarmNyota_SweetAyesha

    WarmNyota_SweetAyesha Chosen One star 7

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    Fantastically eloquent and insightful!! Just what Obi-Wan needed to hear and ponder. =D=
     
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  18. Anedon

    Anedon Jedi Grand Master star 4

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    Great, some of the interactions remind me of the old Jedi Apprentice/Quests series. Also remember that Avatar episode you mentioned. :)
     
  19. devilinthedetails

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    @WarmNyota_SweetAyesha As always, thank you so much for commenting!:) I'm so flattered that you found this story to be so eloquent and insightful because I really wanted to do justice to this conversation that I've wanted to write about for so long. It makes me so happy that you felt Qui-Gon's Force Ghost said exactly what Obi-Wan needed to hear and ponder since that's what I was hoping to accomplish with this story.

    @Anedon Thank you so much for commenting!:) I did really enjoy the Jedi Apprentice and Quest books, so it makes me happy to hear that you were reminded of that series by these stories. And I really enjoyed that Avatar episode and it was lovely to be able to use it as inspiration for a story I never would've come up with otherwise!
     
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  20. Seldes_Katne

    Seldes_Katne Jedi Grand Master star 2

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    Devilinthedetails, I apologize for not reviewing sooner – summer is my busiest time of year, and now that I’m getting a break from that, I’ve started reading through other people’s Summer Olympics stories.

    I think my favorite of the collection is “Peace and Wisdom” (any place that has a Room of a Thousand Fountains is appealing, even before the philosophical discussion that follows). I applaud anyone who wants to find Wisdom – it’s often elusive, and while I might have chosen that one over Peace, I can’t fault Obi-Wan for his pick.

    And now I want a fountain somewhere in the house….

    Qui-Gon’s voice sounds exactly as I remember it from TPM; he’s one of my favorite characters, and I think you depicted him well here, and in “Blinding Light,” too. It’s like having that calm, kindly voice that can be either comforting or challenging, but you know the person cares about you. Obi-Wan needs that support, I think, as seen in “Stuck in the Present” and “Tragic Irony,” along with “Blinding Light.” I can’t imagine carrying all that guilt alone.

    I noticed that philosophy is carried through “Hope is Lightest When It’s Dark” which reminds me of the Green Lantern comics being published several years ago. They introduced the Blue Lanterns, who were powered by Hope (as the Green Lanterns are powered by Will). They also believed in being a light in the darkness. I liked the fact that the story used both the philosophical and literal meaning of this phrase.

    I like Obi-Wan, although I don’t usually seek out stories just because they feature him, but I enjoyed all of these.
     
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    @Seldes_Katne Thank you so much for reading and reviewing, and no worries. I understand how crazy life can become and there were so many wonderful stories written for this Olympics, that it was very difficult to read them all:)

    "Peace and Wisdom" was a very calming piece for me to write, so I'm so happy that was your favorite story from this collection. The Room of a Thousand Fountains is one place from the Jedi Temple I would love to visit. It sounds so beautiful and tranquil, which made it a pleasure to set a story there and be able to imagine all the soothing details of the place.

    I definitely admire anyone who seeks wisdom and/or peace. Both those qualities are hard to achieve but very noble to strive for and very hard to sort of pick between them.

    I'm so pleased that Qui-Gon's voice sounded exactly as you remember him from TPM. He has always been a favorite character of mine, so I always try to depict him with that sort of calm wisdom. I think Qui-Gon is a great mentor and friend to Obi-Wan, knowing when to be more challenging and when to be more straight-up comforting, and always coming from a place of wanting the best for Obi-Wan, which I think Obi-Wan ultimately understands.

    My mental picture of Obi-Wan is that he is someone who develops a few very deep relationship with people he trusts and relies on a lot like Qui-Gon and Anakin, and so with Anakin gone/fallen to the Dark Side, he needs Qui-Gon all the more, and that Qui-Gon's death would always sort of stick with him as someone he misses and mourns. And I think Qui-Gon could be very helpful in guiding him through his guilt on Tatooine.

    That is an interesting concept with the Blue Lanterns powered by hope versus the Green Lanterns powered by will. Thank you for sharing it!

    I'm so glad that you like Obi-Wan even if you don't usually seek out stories just because they feature and that you enjoyed all of these. Thank you again for your thoughtful comment:)
     
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