Saga The Tale of Tyrena [Unofficial Dare response; Godzilla X-over; haiku verse] Winner Best Poem 2010!

Title: The Tale of Tyrena
Author: Alexis_Wingstar
Note: I took on the challenge of another evil dare someone else decided was too tough. I dare you to write a story that:

-isn't humor.
-features another character from another science fiction fandom.
-has no OC's.
-includes the words beryl, ochroid, heliotrope, viridian and achromatic.
-is written either in the form of three Shakespearean sonnets, 14 haiku, or twenty-one rhyming couplets. You may combine these forms; however, your fic must be written in verse, and it must be forty-two lines long.


Well, MacUnleashed, here it is... i hope you consider Godzilla to be science fiction.

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From Agrilita
Swamps he made his way to the
twin city Tyrena.

Dark viridian
scales of durasteel he had
to protect from harm.

Sithly red his eyes
did glow as he gnashed his teeth
and roared in anger.

Power grids he did
smite as sparks heliotrope
in hue did fly high.

No one knew why he
came nor how he came to be,
this menacing thing.

No one knew his mind
was set to save the city
he seemed to destroy.

For another beast
far worse than he fed on the
town?s energy grid.

Invisible was
this unknown antagonist
to the residents.

They only saw this
fearsome monster from the swamps
lay waste to their home.

Though he saved them all
having vanquished his dark foe,
a hero to them, no.

Ochroid, sapphire,
and green were the lightsabers
which brought him down low.

Achromatic, turned
his scales as his life was shed.
Victory to us?

Bright beryl grass fields
do wave outside the town walls.
Peace once more within.

Who will morn? Instead
the peoples celebrate, for
Godzilla is dead.

 

This is incredibly awesome. I count Godzilla as a science-fiction creature, and this definitely fits all of the requirements. I have to especially commend you on having not made this humor -given that the idea of Godzilla in the first place automatically makes me think of all of those cheesy old movies in which he was played by a giant action figure/puppet thing, I was wondering how you would pull that off, but you did it perfectly.

"Achromatic, turned
his scales as his life was shed.
Victory to us?"

This was my favorite stanza -again, it's serious, and the "achromatic" really works there.

 

Wow... that's such a seriously difficult dare, but you completed it wonderfully! Fabulous! Very, very well written and I'm glad you kept it serious though you could have easily done something else with it.

I'm impressed; an evil dare with a fabulous conclusion. Bravo!

 

WOW a difficult dare but very touching.

 

Thanks everyone. The original concept was Peter Parker (Spiderman) and Mary Jane planning what to wear to a masquerade ball in sonnet style, and it was humorous... then realized it was supposed to be serious so I scrapped it (i had only written 4 lines anyway). Once I settled on Godzilla and haiku (which in my opinion go together well), it all fell into place. The idea of the actual story in the poem actually came from an episode of Ultraman, so it this really had a heavy Japanese influence. I'm glad you all enjoyed it.

Thank you, MacUnleashed, for coming up with the dare. I'm not sure I would have come up with this otherwise!

I'd also like to thank whoever nominated this for best poem.