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Saga - OT Things You Said |OTP Challenge 15

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction- Before, Saga, and Beyond' started by Raissa Baiard, May 13, 2020.

  1. Raissa Baiard

    Raissa Baiard Chosen One star 4

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    Title: Things You Said
    Author Raissa Baiard
    Genre: Romance
    Timeframe: OT
    Characters: Ensemble cast
    Synopsis: Short stories based on the prompts for the OTP Challenge #15, "Things You Said"

    Thanks to @Findswoman for beta-reading @};-

    This is already on its way to becoming an anthology thread; I have another story in the works and an idea percolating. But for this first story, I'm going old school with my original OTP: Raissa and Doran Blayne from Everyone Comes to Doran's Place and In the Cards. These stories laid the foundation for what became the Marzra-Verse. Their family story has grown into a multi-generational saga.
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    ….At the Kitchen Table

    “Doran Blayne! Those cookies are for Life Day!”

    “No one’s going to miss a few. You made enough to feed a small army”.

    “In case you haven’t noticed, with all our grandchildren and Hera and Kanan’s children, I am feeding a small army. And since when have you ever stopped at a ‘few’ Wookiee cookies? Not since I’ve known you!”

    “All right, all right. Just one more. You know, I still remember the first time you baked these for me…do you?”

    “Of course I do! It was our first Life Day together, back on Merkesh. I don’t know who ate more of those cookies—you or Frugly.”

    “We drank hot chocolate and watched terrible movies. And you gave me a kyber crystal worth more than both of us put together made in a year as a present. Do you ever miss those days?”

    “Sometimes. I never would have thought it possible, but sometimes I do miss Merkesh—our old house, the Café. I miss dear old Frugly; he would have tried to make friends with all the Loth-cats, probably the Loth-wolves, too. But I don’t miss having to live a double life, Imperial Prefect by day, Jedi by night.”

    “Still, things were simpler then. It was a lot easier being a cantina owner-slash-fugitive Jedi than joint headmaster of the Academy and a senior Council member. Ha—Mace Windu’s Force ghost is probably still having metaphysical pittins at that!”

    “Whatever the Old Council would have thought, you should be proud of what you’ve built here.”

    “Me? No, I just tagged along for the ride. Kanan…”

    “It hasn’t all been Kanan. You know he couldn’t run the Academy without you. Face it, Doran, you’ve become the thing you swore you never would: an authority figure. And you love it.”

    “Maybe a little…”

    “Mmm-hmm.”

    “But I couldn’t have done it without you. I’d be a lonely, bitter old barkeep if you hadn’t found me and brought me back to the Light.”

    “Doran…”

    “It’s true. You know it is. Without you, I’d have marinated in bitterness and Corellian whiskey until I was a wizened old curmudgeon who made Haaz look cheerful.”

    “Well… I wouldn’t be here without you, either. If you hadn’t discovered I’m Force-sensitive and taken me as your padawan, I’d have been doomed to a short, ignominious career in Imperial public service. “

    “So… we owe it all to each other. And here we are, three children, seven grandchildren and a Jedi Order later.”

    “Some things never change, though. You still can’t keep your hands off the cookies. Don’t think I haven’t noticed you’ve been sneaking more while we talked.”

    “And you’re still my sharp-eyed Prefect!”

    “Come on, we ought to go up to bed. I’ll be up early cooking and you need to rest for your Life Day napping.”

    “Hey, that’s not fair!”

    “But true.”

    “Well, yes, but not fair. All right, I’m coming. You know what else hasn’t changed?”

    “What’s that?”

    “I love you, Raissa. Always.”

    “Mmm. And I love you. Now put the cookies away.”
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    Notes:

    The story of Doran and Raissa’s first Life Day together can be found here.

    Frugly: Raissa’s Force-bonded pet pygmy roba, who has by this time passed away of extreme old age.

    Haaz: the ill-tempered doorman/bouncer at the Cafe Alderaan on Merkesh.

    Three children: Mara, Nick and Annina

    Seven grandchildren: Caleb and Noemi (Mara and Ezra); Aric, Melinda, and Pheylan (Nick and Mella), Lyra and Owen (Annina and Luke)
     
  2. WarmNyota_SweetAyesha

    WarmNyota_SweetAyesha Game Host Who Loves Fanfics & RPGs star 7 VIP - Game Host

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    SQUEEEEEEEEEEEEE! SQUEEEEEEEEEEE! If this isn't JUST. WHAT. I. NEEDED TODAY I don't know what! ^:)^ ^:)^
    LOL My Mom has also been accused of making enough to feed a small army. Great food for hungry family/friends. [face_mischief]

    I loved every single solitary word!!
    I loved their reminiscing and the reciprocal I love you's.

    Thank you @Raissa Baiard for posting this. More than I can say. :* [:D]
     
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  3. Kahara

    Kahara Force Ghost star 4

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    RAISSA AND DORAN! [face_love] I was just thinking a few weeks ago that I miss seeing these two around -- though I'm very much enjoying all the younger generations and their stories. :) It's really nice to see them living happily ever after here. The nostalgia for Merkesh might not be what they would have expected to feel when they actually lived there, but it makes a lot of sense. That was where they found each other, after all. I'm glad that Lothal has become a place of happy memories as well. :) And I adored the love-yous mixed with cookie thieving. Some things never change. [face_laugh]
     
  4. Jâd Sphera

    Jâd Sphera Jedi Knight star 1

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    I have not read your previous stories on these characters, but I sure will :)
    This was so heart-warming! [face_love][face_love] I loved reading it.
    You portray Raissa and Doran's love and trust on one another perfectly, it can be felt in each word.
    Great job! =D=
     
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  5. Anedon

    Anedon Jedi Master star 4

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    Nice story, distantly remember the characters from some of your other stories I've read over the years. :)
     
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  6. Raissa Baiard

    Raissa Baiard Chosen One star 4

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    Aww, thank you so much! I'm glad this little vignette was able to give you a lift [:D] Wookiee cookies have always had a special place in the Baiard-Blayne family, and with hungry grandchildren (and hungrier husband!) Raissa needs to make sure she has enough on hand ;) Lots of memories for her and Doran...and many more to come.Some things, like their love, don't change as time goes by.
    Thank you! It was great for me to get back to where it all started with this story, and I'm glad you enjoyed it too. I need to get back to them and fill in some of the gaps in their story, but in the meantime, their happily ever after phase makes me feel warm and fuzzy :D
    Thank you! These two have been together for something like forty years story time by this point (and something like 25 years Real Life time :eek: ) so they have built up quite a history! I'm glad that their love shows through even without knowing their backstory.
     
  7. Raissa Baiard

    Raissa Baiard Chosen One star 4

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    This next vignette is sort of a follow up to Letters Across Hyperspace, featuring Ezra and Sabine reuniting five years after the Rebels finale.

    Thanks to @Findswoman for beta reading @};-
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    ....With No Space Between Us

    “Ezra!”

    “Sabine?! Is that really you?”

    “Ezra!”

    “Sab—Whoa!”

    “‘Whoa?’ I’ve been waiting five years to kiss you, and all you can say is ‘whoa’?!”

    “Well, it was kind of a surprise…I mean, I’m not complaining or anything, but I didn’t even think you… You’ve been waiting five years to kiss me?!”

    “Yes, and I was hoping for something a little more than ‘whoa’ as your response.”

    “Wait… hold on… Five years. When I left, we were… I mean, I always… but you… I didn’t think… This...this is not how I pictured this moment.”

    “How did you picture it, then?”

    “A lot less of me stammering like a moof-milker, for one thing.”

    “I’m serious.”

    “So am I. Okay, so… I thought I’d be the one to see you first, Jedi senses and all that, and I’d call out to you. We’d run to each other and I’d catch you in my arms and just stand here holding you as long as I could. And we’d laugh and maybe cry when we realized this is really real and not just another dream.”

    "You’ve given this a lot of thought."

    “I’ve had a lot of time to think about it.”

    “Okay, then what?:”

    “We’d go to the cantina on the other side of the marketplace and talk for hours about what’s happened to us since I left, and what Hera and Zeb and everyone are doing. And after we’d gotten all that out of the way, I’d tell you that there hasn’t been a day I haven’t thought of you—when I get up, when I go to sleep. I’d tell you I lost count of all the times I tried to catch a glimpse of you in the Force. That I wrote you a stack of letters even though I knew I couldn’t send them…because I love you, Sabine. I always have. I always will.”

    “And I’d tell you that I have my own stack of letters. And that there hasn’t been a day I haven’t thought of you. Because when you were gone, I realized how much you meant to me—how much I trusted and relied on you. And I realized that I love you, too. So—once we told each other everything, what happened?”

    “Well, that was kind of where I thought the kissing might fit in.”

    “That sounds like an excellent idea. I’d hate to completely ruin everything you had planned, so…”

    “I… I didn’t have anything planned out past this point, except, you know, more kissing. I guess I’ll have to make it up as I go along.”

    “You were always good at that.”

    “Yeah, well… Let’s make it up together, okay?”

    “Deal. I love you, Ezra Bridger, and I’m not letting you get away again.”

    “Good, because I don’t want to. Let’s go home, Sabine. I’ve been away too long.”
     
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  8. WarmNyota_SweetAyesha

    WarmNyota_SweetAyesha Game Host Who Loves Fanfics & RPGs star 7 VIP - Game Host

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    SQUEE! Sweet conversation even with all the initial stammering [face_laugh] You can really sense that they've each given this a whole lot of thought and have been longing to find one another again. :)
     
  9. mavjade

    mavjade It's so FLUFFY! Fanfic Manager star 6 Staff Member Manager

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    Hahaha... things like that never go the way we have them built up in our minds. But that's okay, it generally makes for a better memory that way!
    I love how Ezra had it alllll planned out. That's really sweet!
    And the end :D -- perfect!

    Edit: I just realized I'd read your second story and not the first!

    I loved at the kitchen table! Such sweet memories! And yes, I feel like that many kids to feed is like feeding army!
    I love this line! It gives so much depth to their lives together.

    Beautiful job!
     
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  10. Findswoman

    Findswoman Force Ghost star 5

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    ARRIGHT! A Raissa!OTP!Double!Whammy! [face_dancing] [face_dancing] [face_dancing]

    Both of these are so wonderful and fun and tender, and what a great idea to do a little mini-series of them--plus, what an especial treat to see the classic RB OTP of Doran and Raissa back in action! [face_love] I love that the Doraissa vignette centers on the kitchen table and tasty nibbles, given Raissa's cookie-baking talent and Doran's perpetual sweet tooth. :D And wow, I love all the mentions of both ECs and OCs (even dear old Frugly! <3 ) that you managed to work in, all in ways that show just how special they have become to the Blaynes (yes, even you, grumpy old Mace!). It all just goes to show the way this group of very different Jedi from very different eras (and very different phases of your own writing career) have come together as one big caring family in your wonderful 'verse of stories, and there could be no more fitting matriarch and patriarch than these two. Beautiful work. @};-

    Next, for something completely different but no less heartfelt and sweet, we've got a Sabezra reunion! [face_love] This is a relatively new ship to me, too, but the way you write this, I could totally see their eventual reunion being just like this. It's so Young!Love to make these "best laid plans"--and yet turn to a stammering moofmilker in the heat of the moment! (And hey, that's totally understandable, given how long it's been and how unexpected their meeting here seems to be!) In a way, though, Ezra does get to bring his planned sequence of events to completion, and with better results than he could have imagined, too. @};- I love the way their other surviving Ghostmates figure in Ezra's plan as well--even now they're all still a big, loving Space!Family. And nice reference to Letters Across Hyperspace, your first Sabezra piece--well played, ma'am! :D As with that story, I'm so glad you decided to write and post this one and bring it into the challenge--very well done, as always! =D=
     
  11. Anedon

    Anedon Jedi Master star 4

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    Sweet reunion. :)
    Nice moment for these two but that's to be expected if they haven't see each other in five years.
     
  12. Mira_Jade

    Mira_Jade The Fanfic Manager With The Cape star 5 Staff Member Manager

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    Aw! These are both just too sweet! And yay for an anthology thread, especially as that just means more warm and sweet OTP goodness. [face_love]

    Raissa makes several excellent points here. :p Something tells me that she puts all her skills as a long time mother/grandmother, Jedi, and an ex-Imperial prefect into minding cookie monsters like her husband when she has to make enough batches to feed her own small army. [face_love]

    Oh oh oh! [face_love] I started quoting a few lines but then realized I wanted to say the same thing for all of them. So: I love the reminiscing you were able to show between Raissa and Doran. So warm and full of mutual respect and deep love and devotion. They really are their best selves, and are right where they want to be, with each other. How mature and comfortable and right their bond is here was just so warm to view from the outside as a reader. Wonderfully done! =D=

    Ha! And, perfect last line is perfect. [face_laugh] [face_love]


    Then, for ...With no Space Between Us, I loved the energy and emotion you were able to portray, just with dialogue! If your first ficlet read like a fine wine, this was just so young and sweet and full of zest for the future!

    Ha! [face_laugh] This was so perfectly in character for both Ezra and Sabine! I could hear both their voices so clearly. [face_love]

    They've had so much time to envision their reunion, and now that it's here it's so much sweeter! I love the ending of this, and adored glimpsing the beginning of their life together. Just lovely!


    Thanks for sharing both of these with us! I can't wait to see which prompts inspire you next. =D= [face_love]
     
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