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Saga Thy Endless Wait (poem) [ongoing]

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction- Before, Saga, and Beyond' started by DaenaBenjen42, Jan 29, 2006.

  1. MirandaFair

    MirandaFair Jedi Master star 4

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    Aww...Anakin is waiting for his "Angel". *giggles* [face_blush] [face_laugh] [face_batting]
     
  2. AnakinLuver

    AnakinLuver Jedi Padawan star 4

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    I'm with you Miranda! he he...:p Once again, Daena, so beautiful... Anakin is waiting for his destiny... bravo and write more!(you always know i'm gonna ask that![face_batting] )

    Rachel Rose@};-
     
  3. DaenaBenjen42

    DaenaBenjen42 Jedi Grand Master star 5

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    *sneaks in*

    I'm supposed to be doing my homework, but here... Enjoy. :) Thankyou, MirandaFair!

    AnakinLuver: Thankyou! (Yep, the poor boy didn't have to wait that long, did he?)

    *sneaks back out*


    In the Halls of Power
    an old evil
    waits

    In the Halls of Power
    an old evil
    plans

    In the Halls of Power
    an old evil
    schemes

    Waits
    and plans
    and schemes

    Waits
    for oppertunity
    to present
    itself

    In the Halls of Power
    an old evil
    waits


    TBC...
     
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  4. AnakinLuver

    AnakinLuver Jedi Padawan star 4

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    [face_laugh] I'm supposed to be doing my homework too!!! lol... that is priceless... anyways, very very very good!! Sneak in to do some more, okay?! lol... jk!:p

    Rachel Rose@};-
     
  5. MirandaFair

    MirandaFair Jedi Master star 4

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    Hehe...I should be getting ready for tomorrow's workday. *cries*I miss school!*/cries* ;)

    Ooo! An old evil...I love it! Great way to describe Palpatine. [face_laugh] :cool:
     
  6. BrentusofGath

    BrentusofGath Jedi Master star 4

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    Good, good, good. Sorry, don't have time to be more specific. :p
     
  7. DaenaBenjen42

    DaenaBenjen42 Jedi Grand Master star 5

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    AnakinLuver: Well, okay... :)

    MirandaFair: Needs reiterating: Palpatine is eeeevil. Thankyou. :)

    BrentusofGath: Uh-huh... Glad you stopped by, brother darling.



    For over
    a thousand years
    the guardians of peace
    and justice
    were Jedi

    For over
    a thousand years
    the Jedi
    served

    For over
    a thousand years
    the Old Republic
    thrived

    For over
    a thousand years
    the gaurdians of peace
    and justice
    were Jedi

    And then
    darkness came

    Over a thousand years
    of peace
    and justice
    fell into shadow

    The guardians
    were killed
    by the Chosen One
    and all hope
    seemed lost


    TBC...
     
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  8. BrentusofGath

    BrentusofGath Jedi Master star 4

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    Over a thousand years
    of peace
    and justice
    fell into shadow




    True, very true. Good, again.
     
  9. MirandaFair

    MirandaFair Jedi Master star 4

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    @};- Consistantly, great work. :)
     
  10. DaenaBenjen42

    DaenaBenjen42 Jedi Grand Master star 5

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    BrentusofGath and MirandaFair: Thanks, you two. :) Means a lot.



    In his sleep
    he feels it

    In his waking hours
    it does not
    fade

    In his sleep
    she calls
    out to him

    Through space
    no distance
    is too far

    In his sleep
    he feels it

    The call
    can not
    be
    ignored

    In his sleep
    the call
    from home
    is sounded

    Mother
    is in
    danger


    TBC...
     
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  11. AnakinLuver

    AnakinLuver Jedi Padawan star 4

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    =D= Wow... very very good... The last line where it says the Chosen One did all the darkness and all was so tragically beautiful... and the next post of Anakin having dreams of Shimi was so sad... please post soon![face_praying]

    Rachel Rose@};-
     
  12. DaenaBenjen42

    DaenaBenjen42 Jedi Grand Master star 5

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    AnakinLuver: Okay. More, it is. :) (Thankyou, by the way.)



    Hope for the future
    born in a time
    of crisis

    Hope for the future
    one woman
    one man
    going down
    separate paths

    Hope for the future
    on a starship
    a meeting
    takes place
    destiny is decided

    Hope for the future
    separated
    they must be
    on this
    all depends

    Hope for the future
    as darkness
    rises
    a single candle
    burns

    Hope for the future
    one woman
    one man
    going down
    separate paths

    Hope for the future
    hidden
    for protection

    Hope for the future
    one woman
    heart broken
    world shattered

    Hope for the future
    One man
    world shattered
    lost
    in darkness

    Hope for the future
    the candle's light
    of hope
    burns
    while darkness
    reigns


    TBC...
     
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  13. MirandaFair

    MirandaFair Jedi Master star 4

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    The passage with Anakin dreaming of Shmi...so good.

    Hope for the future
    separated
    they must be
    on this
    all depends


    I think that is my favorite verse yet!!! Amazing - loved how you encorporated that. It reads so well! =D= @};-
     
  14. AnakinLuver

    AnakinLuver Jedi Padawan star 4

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    :eek: Wow... this is one of my all time fave posts ever, Daena!!! This was so tragic and heartbreaking... I cried!:_| Please update soon... you were born to write poetry![face_batting]

    Rachel Rose@};-
     
  15. DaenaBenjen42

    DaenaBenjen42 Jedi Grand Master star 5

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    MirandaFair: you may recognize this. :) (Thankyou. Now... other quotes to integrate...)

    AnakinLuver: *hands Rachel a complementary box of tissues* Aww... Glad you're enjoying.




    This changes everything
    a blockade
    with shadow purpose

    This changes everything
    Negotiations
    that didn't take place

    This changes everything
    here and now
    communications disrupted
    invasion
    there is no going back

    This changes everything
    two Jedi
    a Gungan

    This changes everything
    there's always
    a bigger fish
    in the planet core

    This changes everything
    here and now
    a choice to go
    and plead the case
    there is no going back

    This changes everything
    a damaged engine
    a desert world
    repairs are needed

    This changes everything
    a queen in disguise
    a slave boy
    destiny entwined

    This changes everything
    a podrace
    win or lose
    and destiny
    is here

    This changes everything
    here and now
    a mother's love
    a son's freedom
    there is no going back

    This changes everything
    unlikely winner
    bets won
    and bets lost

    This changes everything
    here and now
    an old evil
    returning
    there is no going back

    This changes everything
    too old
    for training
    Future uncertain


    TBC...
     
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  16. BrentusofGath

    BrentusofGath Jedi Master star 4

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    This changes everything
    too old
    for training
    Future uncertain




    =D= Good framework.
     
  17. AnakinLuver

    AnakinLuver Jedi Padawan star 4

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    =D= Wow... great choice of words on this one, Daena!!! I loved it... the last stanza really got me... no one knew what the future held for our little Anakin...:_|

    Rachel Rose@};-

    More?[face_batting]
     
  18. MirandaFair

    MirandaFair Jedi Master star 4

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    This changes everything
    there's always
    a bigger fish
    in the planet core


    Heheh...[face_laugh] I always get a crack at that part. Wonderful, as always. @};- :)
     
  19. DaenaBenjen42

    DaenaBenjen42 Jedi Grand Master star 5

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    BrentusofGath: Thankyou. Yes, it's good to have good framework in a poem. Glad you like it.

    AnakinLuver: :) Yep... more!

    MirandaFair: Qui-Gon when he's blase: of the funny. Thankyou for the feedback, MirandaFair.




    The order was given
    given
    with but a thought

    The order was given
    and obeyed

    The order was given
    to clear the way
    for evil's plan

    The order was given
    and in a hail
    of blaster fire
    an order falls

    The order was given
    given
    with but a thought

    The order was given
    and pain was felt

    The order was given
    and obeyed
    an order fell
    to clear the way
    with but a thought

    The order was given
    the galaxy changed
    and was hurled
    into war

    The order was given
    and answered: "It will
    be done, my lord."


    TBC...
     
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  20. MirandaFair

    MirandaFair Jedi Master star 4

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    *Shivers*

    Ah the magic number: 66!

    These are my two favorites...

    The order was given
    and in a hail
    of blaster fire
    an order falls


    and

    The order was given
    the galaxy changed
    and was hurled
    into war


    Amazing, as always! =D= You are really growing as a poet! @};-
     
  21. BrentusofGath

    BrentusofGath Jedi Master star 4

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    The order was given
    and obeyed
    an order fell
    to clear the way
    with but a thought




    That was really good. Glad you're still doing this!
     
  22. AnakinLuver

    AnakinLuver Jedi Padawan star 4

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    =D= Bravo, Daena!! I loved the last stanza... so true... more?[face_batting]

    Rachel Rose@};-
     
  23. DaenaBenjen42

    DaenaBenjen42 Jedi Grand Master star 5

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    Aw... Thanks, ladies and gentelman. Glad you're enjoying this.

    Wrote this yesterday for National Star Wars Day. Enjoy. :) (and my homework is done! Yay!)


    Out there among the stars
    an adventure waits

    On the desert planet
    in a Toydarian's shop
    a young boy
    serves
    and dreams

    Far away on Corellia
    a family plans
    for a new
    arrival

    On Alderann
    a man
    and a woman
    hope
    for a child

    Out on the dunes
    on the desert planet
    a mother longs
    and hopes
    for her son

    On Naboo
    a young girl
    becomes queen

    In Mos Espa,
    a man
    and a woman
    meet

    Out there among the stars
    an adventure waits


    TBC...
     
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  24. AnakinLuver

    AnakinLuver Jedi Padawan star 4

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    =D=

    Wow!!! Yesterday was National Star Wars Day?!!!! I didn't know that... oh well... very very very moving, Daena, once again you blow me away!!! More?(hee hee)

    Rachel Rose@};-
     
  25. BrentusofGath

    BrentusofGath Jedi Master star 4

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    Another good update. Keep'em coming. :) And Yay for homework! (Being finished that is)