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Before - Legends To Skin a Gundark (Trett) --COMPLETE

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction- Before, Saga, and Beyond' started by Mistress_Renata, Oct 26, 2003.

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  1. Sarah_K

    Sarah_K Jedi Master star 4

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    AIIIIEEE!! *races onto thread with a speed that would put Nascar to shame, black cat clinging to her shoulder with all claws* Great leaping Sith! Rendell finally got a padawan fic and I can't believe how late I am. :eek: SO incredibly sorry, Renata, but I forgot that you don't usually list stories in your bio until *after* they are finished -- it took til today for me to check your recent posts! *smacks forehead* But late is (I have heard) better than never, and now I shall blather off some feedback for the stuff I missed. :p *dislodges cat and begins hammering at her keyboard*

    You have chosen a most interesting and multi-faceted issue here; and honestly I have yet to think of a really serious reason why it has to be AU. I mean, it may be unlikely that slavery would still be in existence, but what is the canon evidence that it's impossible? Hm. Well, to be even more honest, I haven't read very many EU books, so maybe this is an elementary bit of logic here and you are looking at me with raised eyebrows. ;) All the same, AU or not, I am loving this already!

    It is very interesting to me the role you have assigned the Jedi in this shaky business -- particularly Myron's explanation to Rendell about the many ways to skin a Gundark. That is so very true! There are times that demand instant and definitive action (and this may well be one of them), but frequently it is a mixture of frontal attack and backdoor intelligence that wins the day. I shared a pleasant chuckle of delight of Myron's method of using the laws to his advantage, particularly in the way he nullified their profits over a matter of temperature and cargo size. [face_devil] Mwahaha! I am also experiencing all those same sensations of disgust that plagued me during Of Bonds And Beauty, namely: the casual way in which everyone talks about the slaves! Even the discussing 75 degrees as 'the standard for keeping humans' rattled me -- as if humans were tropical fish or naked mole rats. :mad:

    'Nough of that or Sarah will pop a blood vessel.

    Your easy insertion of minor characters continues to make me grin in the most idiotic manner. I loved the slaves in the kitchen! Sad though their position may be, they are just so REAL. Poor Rendell: trying to be polite and avoid messes and all the while worrying that he'll get in trouble later. *sigh*

    Details that deserve a mention because I can't give them a paragraph: Myron's tea ritual (which was so very... *Myron*), Rendell's appetite (which was so very... *boy*), the vivid descriptions of the Viceroy's mansion, the constant presence of slaves wherever they turn (unpleasant, but realistic), the explanation behind the slave and her daughter (*bangs head over injustice a bit more* Ow.), and Myron's last line there, "Women" (LOL!! Oh dear, must breath now... [face_laugh])

    I wonder if the pirates are stealing slaves to set them free... *shakes crazy thought from head*

    It's really cool seeing Trett younger, mostly because you recognize here the things in him that will remain the same and also the things about Myron that he will inherit. Especially the master's care for his padawan. ;) Rendell's inability to accept this problem manages to be two things: healthy and dangerous. I look forward to seeing more! *sets up lawn chair, tea set, box of chocolates, and can of tuna*

    So basically: I stand in drop-jawed awe of your writing skills, but that's common enough on your threads, and I wish to talk a good deal more, but Darth You-have-a-job-and-must-grow-up-a-little has my schedule in a death-grip. :p

    Lucy has happily latched on to your one reference to Abyssnans and is purring to beat the band. I swear, that cat has a one track mind...

    Sarah >^,,^<

    (p.s. I already posted this, but I'm not sure if it stuck, so here it is again :D)
     
  2. PadawanKitara

    PadawanKitara Jedi Master star 5

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    Look- it's Sarah and Lucy the cat :) Did Lucy catch the kitty cat post on Renata & Jane's other story?

    The only thing I can say about the posts is poor Trett. That talk had to come sometime.
     
  3. Sarah_K

    Sarah_K Jedi Master star 4

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    Hey, Kitara! :)

    No, Lucy didn't know that, and come to think on it... neither did I! Which one was that? :D

    Sarah >^,,^<
     
  4. PadawanKitara

    PadawanKitara Jedi Master star 5

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    It's the An-Paj story under JaneJinn's name. I think it's on this board. Sorry, I'm really bad at creating links.

    Can anyone help her find it with a link?
     
  5. dianethx

    dianethx Jedi Master star 6

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    I can give her a link...

    [link=http://boards.theforce.net/message.asp?topic=13446302&page=8]Invisible Enemy[/link]
     
  6. Knight_Dilettante

    Knight_Dilettante Jedi Padawan star 4

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    Poor Trett. I'm not bothering to sympathize with Myron for having to have the talk since he does not seem the least bit uncomfortable.

    I really feel sorry for those chamber maids though. It might not be so bothersome if it were all you knew but if you had not been a slave your entire life it must be pretty icky to be in the position of having to provide any service. I fully undertand Myron's arguments but ick to the nth degree.

    kd
     
  7. Sarah_K

    Sarah_K Jedi Master star 4

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    Thanks for the link! *sets off in pursuit of Invisible Enemy, Lucy hot on her heels...* ;)

    Sarah >^,,^<
     
  8. Jane Jinn

    Jane Jinn Jedi Knight star 5

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    I have the feeling that these girls are chosen to be chambermaids because of their beauty. I wonder if they feel that they're better than the other slaves, or at least more privileged because they don't have to do heavy work? I did like the way that they "stampeded" to draw back the drapes before Myron could get there.

    I'm also very relieved that Myron is teaching Rendell not to go against his personal beliefs, no matter what pressure comes from outside!

    By the way the maids reacted, you can certainly tell they're not used to be treated politely. I'll bet people just shout at them, or otherwise treat them as part of the furniture. Was it just my imagination, or were they intrigued by the Jedi? It almost sounded like they were more eager than normal -- or do they really act so eager all the time?

    I thought that it was very interesting that Myron should tell Rendell that he would need to be able to protect himself when necessary, when it comes to women. Or did he mean the kind of protection you can keep in your pocket? Hmm. Are we going to get to listen in on the details of this talk?
     
  9. Mistress_Renata

    Mistress_Renata Manager Emeritus star 5 VIP - Former Mod/RSA

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    Sorry about last night, everyone! I was feeling under the weather, just completely exhausted, and couldn?t face doing anything more difficult than pressing buttons on the remote. :(

    Sarah_K! Lucy! You made it! Believe me, you have been missed!

    Thank you, KoS; I was thinking of a lavish, Naboo-type of place? though I think the Naboo palaces aren?t QUITE so garish as the Viceroy? ;)

    Jane & KD, I have to say, the talk I will leave to your fevered imaginations. :D It?s along the lines of ?How to protect yourself from predatory females who only want?? Well, you get the idea. ;) The importance of self-respect, mutual respect, that sort of thing. Standard Master Lecture #703 (after #702, ?Why Force-Sensitives Shouldn?t Drink Espresso?).

    Yes, indeed, dianethx, Xanatos & Kitara, the girls certainly don?t expect ?respect? from any of the guests. They?re glad to have lighter duty than average, believe me!

    Poor Ish. How?s your toe?

    And welcome, Kit! Hope you enjoy this. I try very hard when writing a story to make sure that the readers don?t need to know tons of the backstory in order to follow it, so I hope it makes sense.

    Okay, enough yakking from me. You want to get on with this. So, when last we left our heroes?

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    Dinner was as lavish as anything Myron had ever experienced. It was all new to Trett, who gaped at the groaning tables until he remembered his manners and clamped his mouth shut.

    They had been escorted to a small reception hall where they had mingled informally with the other guests, listening to music played on pipes by several slave girls, until the Viceroy appeared, in flowing robes of bronze-colored shimmersilk. Myron saw that he was being escorted by two Jedi, younger Knights, who Myron only vaguely recognized. The young Knights bowed in recognition of the Master, who nodded, and bowed his own greeting.

    "Viceroy Sarrell," he said.

    "Master Myron. I was told you would be coming." The Viceroy turned to glance at the younger Jedi. "But you are here to investigate the pirate raids, yes? I thought your colleagues here had been assigned to supervise the auctions, and ensure that they meet the Senate standards."

    "You are correct, my Lord. My Padawan, Rendell Trett, and I will naturally be glad to assist them in any way, if they should require our help, but I doubt we will be needed." He smiled at them. The human male Jedi smiled back. He wore the distinctive striped headdress of Aramna, a nod to his heritage. The Iphiarin, a female, had eschewed the customary tribal markings of her people, but had a small Jedi rune for "peace" tattooed in the center of her forehead. Her long pointed ears and prehensile snout twitched as she took in her surroundings.

    "You have met the other guests? Lord Karaffnik and Syourr Anaman are the heads of the two main auction houses here on Ananzial. Lord Tikat is the head of our Treasury. Viffniss Enjen, Mr. Pezh, Mistress Nakhoul and Prince Ma-Barani are some of the most prestigious traders here." He shot a sharp look at Myron. "Dule Orduy, of the Trade Federation, had to decline our invitation, for some reason."

    "I have met Lord Orduy," murmured Myron. He nodded politely. "I am anxious to get whatever information you may have on these pirate raids. The Chancellor and the Senate Regulatory Commission are very concerned."

    The traders exchanged glances.

    "We will discuss it over dinner," announced Sarrell. "Come, let's go in."

    The room was long, with a golden mosaic roof held up by delicate columns, and a gleaming floor of polished stone. Silk draperies were used to divide it from the rest of the palace, just as the guest areas were separated from each other.

    A lavish buffet had been set up along one side of the room, with the food arranged into bouquets shaped like flowers, so that it was colorful and beautiful. Several attractive slave girls were clustered nearby. Myron fell into line behind the other guests. One of the young women picked up a plate, and began to follow him, waiting to hear what he would like her to serve him. There
     
  10. dianethx

    dianethx Jedi Master star 6

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    Sorry, but this post made me hungry!!! Did you write it before dinner? All that delicious food and yet the slavery abounds! I'm curious to see where you are going with the addition of two more Jedi. It should be interesting to see how they will react with Trett and Myron about the pirates.
     
  11. Keeper_of_Swords

    Keeper_of_Swords Jedi Master star 5

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    yeah..very relaxing.
     
  12. Mistress_Renata

    Mistress_Renata Manager Emeritus star 5 VIP - Former Mod/RSA

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    Okay, the bad news is I am going out of town tomorrow, and won't be back until Tuesday. So you'll have to hang tight. In return, I will not leave you on a cliffhanger. *checks* Nope. :D

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    The traders exchanged glances. Myron felt a sudden prickle at the back of his spine, but he couldn't have said why.

    "There is not much to tell," said Nakhoul. She was Orous, with pale blue skin falling in folds of fat, designed to protect her species from the frigid environment of their homeworld. Her elaborately manicured hands tore apart some small gamebird, seeking the tender meat. "There has always been pirate activity. Indeed, some of the largest trade concerns had their origins in freebooting."

    "Such as mine," added Prince Ma-Barani. "Slave caravans have always been one of the richest targets, ever since space travel became possible. Pirates raided the first settlements, as well."

    "I am well aware of history," said Myron, suppressing impatience. It was hard not to be, when the Jedi Preceptories were designed specifically to discourage pirate raids. Force-sensitive children had been highly-sought after centuries ago, and a Master's promise to protect his Padawan had had real significance back then. "But there has been an increase in piracy reports, lately, both on cargo ships and trade facilities, and the Chancellor is concerned. Do any of you have any ideas?"

    There was a pause. "Well," said Tikat finally, "I have been following these reports, to an extent. It seemed to me that the increase occurred after the Senate ratified the Haoule-Simini Act. With increased restrictions on legitimate trade markets, I've heard rumors that the crime syndicates have started a black market in slaves. The pirates probably figure it's an easy way to cash in."

    "It's certainly inconvenient," drawled Lord Karaffnik. Myron tried not to wince as the grey-horned male picked something from between his teeth with a long, pointed fingernail. "I had a commission to auction an extremely fine consignment from the estate of Prince Urushvin. Some trained mechanics, lots of healthy agricultural laborers, and he was a collector of dancers. He had some of the finest, from Ryloth, Sithatta, Malastare, Calabria and Merendia."

    Nakhoul looked up with interest. "I heard a rumor he had some Corellians," she said. Myron and the Jedi looked at Karaffnik sharply. Corellia was one of the systems where slavery had been outlawed for eons.

    Karaffnik glanced uneasily at the Jedi. "Fifth generation, purebred," he said, clearing his throat. "Two pilots and a dancer. They would have fetched thirteen thousand apiece, easily. But they were being held at a transfer lot, it was raided..." He shrugged. "No one's run across any of them since."

    "It must have been hard on the estate, to lose all that money," said Amut. "I understand his heirs are deeply in debt."

    "They filed a claim," said Pezh, "so I'm sure they got some of the insurance. Still, to lose a consignment like that..."

    "Have the crime syndicates always been involved in slavery?" asked Trett.

    The traders turned to frown at him. He was, in their eyes, certainly not important enough to take seriously. Myron was proud, though. It was a good question for the boy to ask, and he'd been polite about it. He hadn't yet made a snappish comment and hadn't even cast any dirty looks at a group of people he must dislike.

    The Viceroy had not forgotten, though, that he was the host, and that Trett, while young, was still a Jedi. He was courteous as he answered. "They've always had it as a sideline," he said. "It's profitable, legal--in most systems-and provides a convenient front for their shadier activities. But the restrictions on the trade mean that the price of slaves has increased sharply. Unfortunately, the costs of a legitimate market are high enough to make it unprofitable, in spite of inflation." He looked at the Jedi, with a frown. "Surely the Senate must see that regulating the slave trade is only adding to the crime wave. Open and free markets are the best for everyone."

    Trett open
     
  13. padawan lunetta

    padawan lunetta Jedi Grand Master star 6

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    Ohh nice post, loved how they're all being so polite, those can be the most dangerous and creepiest of villains. Yes...what ARE they hiding?!
     
  14. dianethx

    dianethx Jedi Master star 6

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    Oh, that was so creepy. They are hiding something...probably a front for the pirates! And they see nothing wrong with slavery....makes me sick!

    Good job.
     
  15. Xanatos_son_of_Crion

    Xanatos_son_of_Crion Jedi Youngling star 2

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    [face_anger]

    [face_anger]

     
  16. PadawanKitara

    PadawanKitara Jedi Master star 5

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    It does seem as though they are hiding something.

    Speaking of Pirates...Did you hear that the DVD goes on sale 12/2 :D
     
  17. Jane Jinn

    Jane Jinn Jedi Knight star 5

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    Do I sense an insurance scam here? The slave owners themselves are the pirates, who steal their own slaves, get the insurance money, and then sell the slaves on the black market for additional profit? Enjen seems particularly sensitive about money. Hmmm.

    This dinner sounds positively Roman! I liked the way that Rendell didn't like the pwert egg, and managed to hide the rest under a leaf!

    Interesting that two Jedi are here to supervise the slave auctions. With all the trafficking in slaves that goes on throughout the galaxy, you'd think that the Jedi scarcely have time for anything else. I did like the way that Amut and Sen-sanai argued in favour of the restrictions, gently pointing out why they were necessary, and managing not to insult any of the traders.

    Sorry to hear you're going away, Renata! I can't wait to see what these traders are hiding.
     
  18. Sarah_K

    Sarah_K Jedi Master star 4

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    *smiles big* Thanks Renata! You sure know how to make a cat and her girl feel all warm, welcome, and snuggly. ;)

    Well, 'militant abolitionists' had been my guess, but it doesn't look like that's the case. Maybe they're stealing from themselves for the insurance money... Or maybe Dorothy Sayers is doing weird things to my brain. :p

    More glorious description! The dinner, the method of serving (has no one on this planet heard of droids??), and all the guests. Can one compare good words with chocolate? Hm. :D

    Myron is a lot like his padawan inside, isn't he? His distaste for pomp goes beyond the usual Jedi love of simplicity, methinks.

    Good job Rendell! He's not a Temple drop-out after all. ;) That was so sweet about Myron being proud of him! I had to laugh over Sen-sanai's continuing of the boy's hidden thought. *crafty grin*

    Now the question remains: what ARE they hiding?? ?[face_plain]

    Lucy says that, while 'pwert' may never gain the same catchy notoriety that has followed 'snorg', it is a close second. Pwert, pwert, pwert... :p

    Sarah >^,,^<
     
  19. PadawanKitara

    PadawanKitara Jedi Master star 5

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    Sorry, it doesn't have quite the same humorous ring to it a SNORG. snorg, snorg, snorg 8-}
     
  20. Sarah_K

    Sarah_K Jedi Master star 4

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    Aye, Kitara, 'tis true! ;) Snorg, snorg, snorg... *Sarah's family begins to look at her strangely*

    Sarah >^,,^<
     
  21. Knight_Dilettante

    Knight_Dilettante Jedi Padawan star 4

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    Just upping this so that Mistress_Renata can find it easily this afternoon when she gets back from vacation, so she'll have no excuse not to post the next bit. If that is when she gets back - I knew I should have pressed for more details. I could have had her paged at the airport to remind her to post as soon as she walked in the door at home.

    Tomorrow we get to start a chorus of "why are we waiting" complete with banging forks on the table since we're still at the banquet. [face_innocent] < Just practicing.

    KD
     
  22. Keeper_of_Swords

    Keeper_of_Swords Jedi Master star 5

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    Enjoyable.

    waiting to read more...
     
  23. Mistress_Renata

    Mistress_Renata Manager Emeritus star 5 VIP - Former Mod/RSA

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    Well, thanks for upping, KD, it WAS much easier to find! LOL! I'm glad you at least gave me a chance to phone Mom to let her know I was home safe, first... (We know what mothers are like when their kids are away on missions! ;) )

    And thank you all for being so patient. I do think "snorg" has more of a ring than "pwert". LOL! Are you still have problems getting that client's name right, Kitara? [face_laugh]

    I had a FABULOUS time in New Orleans, ate like... well, like I was at the Viceroy's banquet. And had a beer at an authentic old pirate hangout, so I'm all set for Talk Like A Pirate Day next year! Arrr...

    (Oh, and took a swamp tour, supervised by several cats. Apparently, while alligators find dogs tasty, they don't go after cats. Wise reptiles!)


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    "We have no proof of that, either," said Anaman. The decorative suspensas on his horns danced and flashed in the candlelight. His green eyes darted from one Jedi to the next. "But I would not rule it out as a possibility. The abolitionists grow confident. The actions of the Senate have made them bold."

    Sarrell glanced at Amut and Sen-sanai before adding, "There is an abolitionist group here for the auctions. They claim to be a watchdog organization, here to monitor the sales and investigate the treatment of the merchandise. Ridiculous, really! That is what your Order is for!" He turned to Amut. "You must have encountered them?"

    "Yes, we have," said Amut. He looked at Myron, explaining, "The group is called FETRS, Freedom and Equal TReatment for Slaves , and it's a non-profit organization run by a woman named Chassala Nier. She's Corellian. Their goal is to monitor slave trade activity, ensuring that the conditions set by the Senate are met. They also work with Open Arms, another big abolitionist group, whose primary purpose is to help former slaves adjust to freedom by education, job training, and resettlement."

    "Are they known for any connection to any of the militant groups?" asked Myron.

    "Not that we know of," said Sen-sanai. "There are three known militant groups. Two seem to act independently, and one is said to be an affiliate of The Freedom Alliance, which is working on political activity to end slavery."

    "That does not mean that FETRS has no militant branch!" added Nakhoul. She jerked her head towards her server impatiently. The young woman quickly brought over a bowl of warm water so that the other woman could rinse her hands.

    "There are any number of small splinter groups, or radicals who could be allied with them," growled Enjen.

    "But liberated slaves would be turning up," Myron pointed out.

    "Not necessarily," said Anaman, frowning. "There are a lot of small, out-of-the way systems that welcome new settlers without any questions asked. And many well-populated, "free" systems where a slave could blend in to a larger city with a new name and make a new life. How many escaped slaves do you think are holed up on Coruscant, hm?"

    Myron looked thoughtful. He personally knew of twenty, and Coruscant was technically a slave system, although only the very wealthiest could afford slaves. It was politically incorrect, and the truly trendy beings were purchasing protocol droids, one of the few fads he hoped would catch on.

    "We continue to search for the missing," said Karaffnik. "Unless they are caught in system, or within the first seventy-two hours, it is next to impossible to catch up with him." He raised an eyebrow at the Jedi. "Even your members don't seem to have very much luck."

    Sen-sanai bristled, raising her trunk in anger, and Trett looked up at him, glaring, but Myron and Amut shared an amused glance. "Our numbers are few," said Myron smoothly, "and the Galaxy is a very large place. There simply are not enough of us to go around. Even before the Hyperspace wars, we could not meet the demands for our services, and now..." He allowed his voice to trail off. The traders fell silent. The Hyperspace Wars had nearly been the end of the Republic, and slavery had been a major bone of contention. Union had been preserved, but at
     
  24. Xeana

    Xeana Jedi Youngling star 2

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    Can't wait for the council! Then we get to see what ideas the Jedi came up with.


    Great job and welcome back!
     
  25. dianethx

    dianethx Jedi Master star 6

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    Oh, yes, something is definitely afoot! So these slavers don't want the Jedi to see the pirated ship...how "interesting". I liked the discussion about the abolishionists and what is going on with them. Sounds very familiar to me from the Civil War era...

    Good job! Keep going!
     
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