Beyond - Legends Total Eclipse of the Heart (Anakin/Tahiri/Jacen poem/songfic)

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  1. Lady_Tahiri

    Lady_Tahiri Jedi Master star 4

    Dec 23, 2001
    I don't own Star Wars and I'm making no money off this. Also, to give due credit, the last three lines are taken from Bonnie Tyler?s song of the same title. This poem was inspired by "Que Vuelvas" by Shakira, which is why some of my phrasing is weirdly reminiscent of the lyrics to that song (mangled after I finished wrangling with the Spanish syntax).

    Total Eclipse of the Heart (Anakin/Tahiri/Jacen)

    I have named the stars and counted droplets of rain
    I have invented language and renounced paradise
    I have cauterized time?s wounds and sealed my grief with ashes
    I have forgotten how to remember, ever since I lost you

    I have seen the death of dance and song and poetry
    When we were children, the seashore was awash in gold
    How did it all turn into waves of bitterness
    Rivers of blood
    Cataracts of loneliness?
    What do I tell the whole world as they watch me tumble to the ground
    Bereft of all desire to fly?

    How do I hide my broken wings
    My callused feet
    My stunted soul?
    There seems no point in falling
    If you won?t be there to catch me

    I wish the nightingales would fall silent
    That the conquerors would know defeat
    That the sane would go senseless
    That the summers would die and dawn would never come
    I wish I could recall the taste of


    Were there at the birth of my galaxy
    When matter and heat and need exploded in a
    Supernova of certainty, a paroxysm of pain

    You were there to pick up the shards of my broken self
    And fit them into something resembling the image
    Graven into your brother?s heart

    But you are not your brother
    And I am not who I was
    For I was remade in the forge of your darkness
    And scorched by the fire of your conviction
    And if you tell me now to rip out my still-beating heart with my bare hands I would say
    He left it in your keeping long ago
    And if you promise to take me to him I would say
    Everything you tell me is a lie
    But if you swear that the moon will replace the sun in the sky, then there is
    Nothing I can say
    Nothing I can do
    Total eclipse of the heart

  2. WarmNyota_SweetAyesha

    WarmNyota_SweetAyesha Chosen One star 8

    Aug 31, 2004
    Oh that was stunning! Absolutely! Bravo! =D= [:D]

    I will definitely devour any more fics of yours that come along!

  3. Lady_Tahiri

    Lady_Tahiri Jedi Master star 4

    Dec 23, 2001
    Thank you! :) Very glad you liked it.
  4. Maggy

    Maggy Jedi Master star 4

    Oct 2, 2004
    that's beautifully done :D
  5. FelsGoddess

    FelsGoddess Game Host star 5 VIP - Game Host

    Sep 5, 2004
    Lovely piece. Very strong emotions. I love the style you used for this. =D=
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