STAR WARS FAN FILM SCRIPT...please review!

okay, so it's not much yet, but here's a start:

EXT. SPACE

A SMALL CRUISER soars through space, approaching the ominous planet of Mispar.

INT. SMALL CRUISER ? PASSENGER QUARTERS

A young man, (JEDI KNIGHT), stands in front of a HOLOPROJECTOR. As he presses a button, a ROBED FIGURE appears before him, in a monotone blue color.

(JEDI KNIGHT)
Master, We are making our final approach on Mispar now. We shall be on the planet?s surface shortly.

ROBED FIGURE
(nodding)
Excellent work, (Jedi Knight). I am transmitting (MISSING JEDI)?S last known coordinates now.

The console in front of (Jedi Knight) makes a few noises.

(JEDI KNIGHT)
Coordinates received, my master. It shouldn?t take long to locate (Missing Jedi) if it?s merely a malfunctioning transmitter.

ROBED FIGURE
Careful, young (Jedi Knight). You may have completed the trials, but I sense this is no routine transmitter fault. Be wary.

(JEDI KNIGHT)
(nodding)
Yes, my master...I feel the disturbance as well. I shall be cautious.

The figure nods his head approvingly.
ROBED FIGURE
Good. May the force be with you.

The figure and (Jedi Knight) bow. The figure disappears in a small transmission flicker.

INT. CRUISER ? COCKPIT

(SPACE PIRATE) sits down, hunched over the controls. (Jedi Knight) enters from behind. He sits down next to (Space Pirate). (Jedi Knight) inserts a DATA CARTRIDGE into the console and presses a couple of buttons.

(JEDI KNIGHT)
(scanning the console)
This is Master (Missing Jedi)?s last known position.

(Space Pirate) studies the console.

(SPACE PIRATE)
There?s a clearing not too far east of there. It?ll be much easier to land somewhere flat than all that mountainous terrain.

(Jedi Knight) punches a few buttons on the console, studying the display.

(JEDI KNIGHT)
According to this topographical scan, that?s a restricted landing area. I?d rather not have planet security breathing down my neck.

(Space Pirate) shrugs.

(SPACE PIRATE)
Don?t worry, I?d like to avoid drawing attention to myself just as much as you. I?ve jammed the planet?s atmospheric sensors, so there isn?t any immediate danger.
(Space Pirate) checks his console.

(SPACE PIRATE)
Alright, we?ll be down in a few moments...I?ve initiated the landing cycle.

EXT. PLANET ? CLEARING ? DAY

The small cruiser gently comes down, settling in a clearing near mountainous terrain.

EXT. PLANET ? MOUNTAIN ? DAY

A cloaked figure, (MISSING JEDI), stands atop a rocky formation. He puts a pair of MACROBINOCULARS to his face.

BINOCULAR?S P.O.V. ? DAY

(Jedi Knight) and (Space Pirate) both mill around in front of the cruiser.

EXT. PLANET ? MOUNTAIN ? DAY

(Missing Jedi) lowers the macrobinoculars. He turns around and enters a well-hidden cave.

 

WOW. That is REALLY well written. It really sounds like a SW screenplay. Congratulations!

The way the Jedi talk to eachother is very accurate.

 

Yea, but what about Jedi names?