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Falls the Shadow,Anakin/Padm ' Compleated October 23 Ch. 14 "End of the Fall"

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  1. anakin_girl

    anakin_girl Jedi Knight star 6

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    :_|

    Poor Ani! :_|

    And what a cliffhangar! What post from Coruscant? :eek:

    Good post, DB.
     
  2. anidanami124

    anidanami124 Jedi Master star 6

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    That's sad :( :_|

    Who hurt Padme's Anakin :mad:

    My Padme is know hurting because her Annie is hurting. and I don't like that [face_devil]
     
  3. jedi-ES

    jedi-ES Jedi Padawan star 4

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    DB,

    Been lurking here, but I think you have an interesting plot forming.

    I can't wait to see where you take this.


    Just don't make it too sad. Please. :_|
     
  4. messicat_kenobi

    messicat_kenobi Jedi Grand Master star 4

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    Interesting story you've got going there, DB.

    I agree with ES, don't make it too sad!
     
  5. DarthBreezy

    DarthBreezy Chosen One star 6

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    DB peeks in....

    *thinks* Hmmmmm... I guess Ani's not the only one who's still sleeping...

    Creeps back out...
     
  6. lori71

    lori71 Jedi Padawan star 4

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    Poor Ani! This is really getting good...I can't wait to read more.

    You know, reading this chapter made me remember our old next door neighbor. He was a Viet Nam vet who had terrible nightmares and flashbacks. We would wake up and hear him yelling just sentence fragments. Good job writing that for Ani...very realistic!

    Lori
     
  7. DarthBreezy

    DarthBreezy Chosen One star 6

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    Monica_Skywalker

    Soon! I promise.. it's in fragment stage at the moment...I have bits and pieces of it but I have to thread them together yet and decide what will have to be clipped from the public JCF version as it can get a bit spiceier in more intimate moments.

    anakin_girl

    Oh you'll see... ;) I have to counter the ASD's with some agnst you know...

    anidanami124

    The only person who hurt our ANi this time was himself... I love Ani to pieces but (to quote Red Forman of That 70's Show) he can be "a real Dumb ass".... :p

    jedi-ES and messicat_kenobi

    No... not TOO sad... ;)

    lori71

    Yes... poor Ani, I've been talking to some friends about Post Tramatic Stress and war experiances that, thankfully, we've only read or been told about.

    Touching on "Freindly fire", I want to point out that it and the subsequent repercussions are a sad fact of warfare and it's always the common soldier who suffers the most. I felt I needed to clarify this before we dip into later chapters as even though it's a small part of this over all story, its an incredibly touchy issue... DB shutting up now!


     
  8. DarthBreezy

    DarthBreezy Chosen One star 6

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    This is the clipped version?
    Hope you like?


    Falls the Shadow

    Chapter 6
    Touch


    Padmé awoke a few hours later, her arm lightly draped over his shoulders. She reached down under the sheet and slowly traced a delicate line from the top of his knee up to his chest, and down again. Anakin shivered slightly, and then rolled over from his stomach on to his side, sighing. A little reluctantly, she withdrew her touch and instead, traced her fingers down his arm, finally taking his hand in her own. To her surprise, his fingers tightened around hers, and he pulled her hand up to his chest.

    "It's not that I don't want you..." He said softly.

    "Then why not?" she asked, more than a little frustrated.

    "It's just not right... not now..." he sighed, struggling for words.


    "So you've said," she conceded, "but you haven't told me 'why'?"

    After a long silence, she pressed again.
    "Anakin..."

    "I don't want to use you!" He blurted out at last. "I love you, and I don't want to just use your body for physical release... I won't do that to you!"

    "Is that's all it?s been Anakin?" she asked quietly, knowing full well that that wasn't the real answer, but it was probably as close as she would get from him now. "Just physical release...?"

    "Of course not!" he cried, sitting up suddenly and then seizing up in pain with the movement. He gasped and she helped him lower himself back down to the bed again.

    Padmé kissed his shoulder and he closed his eyes. "Of course not..." she echoed, kissing his shoulder again tenderly.

    "Please... Please" he choked. "I want you... but I don't want to... Please just not YET... a few days... that's all I ask..."

    "Alright," she sighed reluctantly, realizing that he was really just trying to punish himself and the only thing she could do was have patience with him. "But remember," she whispered softly, bring his hand up to her cheek again. "The release isn't just a physical thing. It?s a way for us to be together in a way that no one else can share..."
    She cast him a teasing look. "As long as you're SURE there's been no one else..."

    He arched an eyebrow at her and wrinkled his nose.

    "Well actually, Padmé..." He began wryly. "You see, when I was on the Medical Frigate there WAS this little droid nurse..."

    They both started giggling, and Padmé knew that the worst of the storm was over for the time being. Their laughter was interrupted by a growling sound emanating from Padme?s stomach, which only caused them to laugh harder.

    "When did you last eat?" Anakin asked her in all seriousness. "At least one of the appetites can be satisfied..."

    "The breakfast that you'd brought me," she admitted. "I haven't been very hungry since, I'm sorry."

    "Go eat," he said tenderly, and tried to suppress a yawn. "Damn healers and their concoctions. I need to sleep... you need to eat. We can work on the rest in the morning..."

    She smiled and slowly got out of bed.
    Leaning over to kiss him she whispered in his ear, "I'm downstairs if you need me, no more acrobatics ok?" Anakin nodded his agreement. She walked to the door and paused just before she left.
    "I love you Ani," she said softly. "With all my heart."

    "I love you too Padmé," he said quietly. "And by the way, I believe its 'Captain Skywalker' now... not Commander..."

    She stood there, wide eyed, unsure what to say. "I'm sorry..." she said quietly at last.

    Anakin kissed at her from the bed. "Don't worry Beloved," he said with a tender smile. "Go eat... If we need to talk about it anymore, well it can wait too... Now go..." He yawned again, lying back carefully on to his side. He snickered as Padmé closed the door behind herself and she allowed another quiet giggle. He was definitely on the road to recovery, she thought. It would just take a little ti
     
  9. anidanami124

    anidanami124 Jedi Master star 6

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  10. JediCami

    JediCami Jedi Youngling star 3

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    i just found this story, very good. but im a bit confused. how did anakin get his black eye? and why wont he touch her that way? keep posting!
     
  11. lori71

    lori71 Jedi Padawan star 4

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    Poor Ani...he's trying to be a gentleman, but Padme is being a little jealous shrew. (OK Lori, pull in the claws) ;)

    Will we be getting mush soon?

    Lori
     
  12. anakin_girl

    anakin_girl Jedi Knight star 6

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    Echoing the call for mush over here! :)

    Good post, DarthBreezy. That part about the droid nurse--LMAO! [face_laugh]
     
  13. DarthBreezy

    DarthBreezy Chosen One star 6

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    Hi All:

    anidanami124
    Glad you like it!

    JediCami
    Silly boy got it when he fell... Clutz that he is, I'm sure he's just trying to make Padme' worry herself to death...

    lori71

    Yes, you KNOW she has lots to be jelous about...


    anakin_girl


    More mush in the works ladies... Soon enough....




    You know, Anakin didn't tell Padme' the Nurse Droid's designation....

    38 DD

    :D :p

     
  14. Scruffy-looking

    Scruffy-looking Jedi Youngling star 3

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  15. Monica_Skywalker

    Monica_Skywalker Jedi Padawan star 4

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    Great post! :D

    I laughed so hard at the droid nurse part i almost started to cry! [face_laugh] I can't wait for more! :)
    ~*Monica*~
     
  16. lori71

    lori71 Jedi Padawan star 4

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    Hi DB!

    It's so nice to be able to log on and read a great story by a talented and thoughtful person. The fan fic board is an oasis in an increasingly nasty and bitter community.

    Keep up the good work...these boards wouldn't be the same without you.

    Can't wait for the next chapter!!!

    Lori
     
  17. IamZam

    IamZam Jedi Grand Master star 5

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    DB is temporarily unable to post, but she wants to let you know she really appreciates all your wonderful ups..

    I will let her explain when she gets back.. I'm just a good friend helping out..

     
  18. lori71

    lori71 Jedi Padawan star 4

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    Well, I hope that DB is resting by the pool, basking in the undivided attention of the PB.

    All hail A&P!

    Lori
     
  19. lori71

    lori71 Jedi Padawan star 4

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    Good night all!

    DB - I'm looking forward to reading Chapter 7 tomorrow!!!

    One last Uppity Up for the night.

    Lori
     
  20. DarthBreezy

    DarthBreezy Chosen One star 6

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    Hi everyone...
    The NEXT chapter is stuck in the space between my head and the keyboard... It will be here in a day or two... circumstances interfered with the creative prosess.


    There IS MUSH [face_love] in the next chappy I promise!!
     
  21. lori71

    lori71 Jedi Padawan star 4

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    Welcome home DB!
     
  22. DarthBreezy

    DarthBreezy Chosen One star 6

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    I'm forcasting a 90% chance of chapter 7 "Eloquence", making it's appearance within 24 hours of this post... It brings with it a 100% chance of Anakin and Padme' mush with a 75% chance of Jedi or political interferance. Darth Writers block seems to be rendered temporarily at bay so I will do my best...

    [face_love]
     
  23. Anakins_Goddess_01

    Anakins_Goddess_01 Jedi Padawan star 4

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    How weird!!!!!!!!!!!!!

    I was just reading this a FF.net! And then I come here... and wham! LOL... I think I'll stick to reading it here tho!
     
  24. jedi scholar

    jedi scholar Jedi Youngling star 3

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  25. DarthBreezy

    DarthBreezy Chosen One star 6

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    Falls the Shadow

    Chapter 7

    Eloquence

    Padmé made her way back downstairs and into the small dining room. To her surprise, Pavot was waiting for her with a bowl of stew and some bread that smelled incredibly appetizing. Until now, she didn't realize how hungry she really had been.

    "Your young man, is he alright now?" She asked quietly. "We were watching the holo-net this evening. They finally released the images from the front from a few weeks ago... it looks terrible. Worse than it was when Naboo itself was invaded." She shook her head sadly. "They say that the battle on Chalacta was one of the worse of the war, that the Separatist launched an ambush, that out of the sixty Jedi that were there, only a few survived at all. Terrible"


    Padme?s thoughts began to wander. A few weeks ago? Sixty Jedi... but Anakin had told her that the casualties were caused by Republic warships... It couldn't possibly have any connection...


    "M'lady?" Pavot touched her shoulder gently. "There's a message for 'Wing Captain' Skywalker, would you like the disc? I would have brought it to you earlier but..." and here she cast her eyes down. "I'm sorry; I didn't think it was appropriate to interrupt... I mean, I brought it up earlier but..."

    Padmé took the woman's hand into her own and patted it gently.

    "I understand Pavot, and thank you. For both of us." she offered her a wan smile. "Perhaps you'd be good enough to get me another bowl of stew and some bread? Anakin is supposed to be sleeping but we know how likely that really is."

    Pavot smiled back and returned to the kitchens.

    "Finish your own supper first my dear, and I'll have some thing made up for him in a few moments."

    Padmé ate her stew in quiet contemplation. The timing was right; the casualties... the casualties were the same... Could Anakin have been mistaken? In the heat of battle, perspectives could be distorted... ships misidentified... a hundred things could have gone wrong...

    She pushed the thoughts aside, and decided that at least for the here and now she would try not to think about it (60 Jedi, 200 clone troopers) at least until tomorrow (maybe 5 of us lived)when she could retrieve any replies to (fired from behind) her inquiries. If there were any to be had...

    "Here you are my dear," Pavot place a tray of food next to Padmé. "I also made him some Anodyne tea, if he needs it. I don't know what Guérisseur left for him but this wont hurt him at all if he drinks it as well. Might do you some good too..."

    Padmé only gave her a wan smile and a quiet thanks as she made her way back upstairs. If Anakin was still asleep she wouldn't wake him, but she would decide weather or not to give him the data disc when she knew what his state of mind was. If he was as... as disturbed as he had been the night before than even the military or the Jedi Council could hang itself for all she cared. Even if he wouldn't do it, someone had to take care of him and apparently the job had fallen to her.

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    She quietly let herself back into the room and wasn't surprised to see him sitting on the side of the bed. So much for sleeping.

    "Ani," she chastised him gently. "Are you ever going to actually rest when you're supposed to?"

    He flashed her a quick smile, and looked back down at the ground.

    "I guess I missed you," he admitted. "When you're next to me, I feel... safer... content." he laughed self depreciatingly. "Brave Star Pilot, aren't I? Like a youngling with out a favorite toy..."

    "Stop it!" Padmé told him suddenly. "You shouldn't act like it's a terrible thing to be afraid!
    Anakin, I don't know how many time we have to have this conversation! You're human, you feel..."

    "Sometimes I think I feel too much," he said quietly. "That one day..." he trailed off.

    Padmé set the tray down and sat next to him on the bed and took his hand. "Ani," s
     
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