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"SECRETS OF A MOTHER, *3/07 *'YES!! QUI-GON STANDS UP TO "MOM"

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction Stories--Classic JC Board (Reply-Only)' started by ewen, Jan 6, 2003.

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  1. Mel_J

    Mel_J Jedi Youngling star 1

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    I don't know why Qui-Gon sees this all as Obi-Wan's fault, the kid is only eight with a father who is far from the easiast person to confess to. What I find worrying is that Qui seems to almost be considering losing Obi when most parents would be determined not to hand over their children.
     
  2. Jenny_The_Jedi_Girl

    Jenny_The_Jedi_Girl Jedi Padawan star 4

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    I agree with you ^
     
  3. Lazy-Bones

    Lazy-Bones Jedi Youngling star 1

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    JJJ & Ewen:
    Well, as I said...just kidding. Duh! ;)
    Obviously Qui-Gon is acting stupid, not Obi. You really think anyone here believes anything else?
    Anyways, I like the story, keep up the good work!
     
  4. Jedi_Knight150

    Jedi_Knight150 Jedi Grand Master star 4

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    Poor Obi. This is sooo not good.
     
  5. snowbee-wan kenobi

    snowbee-wan kenobi Jedi Padawan star 4

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    Awwww, poor Obi must be freaking out right now. After the way Qui snapped at him he's probably not sure what will happen to him.

    Qui better prove us wrong and show he's not a blockhead! He better not give up Obi!
     
  6. JediANGELA

    JediANGELA Jedi Master star 6

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    this is my first post on these boards! i have been following this story since the begining, but ive been been very reluctant to post. this is one of my favorite stories on the boards right now. but dont let obi go!
     
  7. ewen

    ewen Jedi Padawan star 4

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    snowbee-wan kenobi Glad to see a post from you!!!

    JediANGELA Always like to say hi to a newbie on my story. Glad to know you have been reading all along. Don't stay away so long next time.!!!

    Jedi_Knight150 Thanx for sticking around. You are sometimes my hardest critic but I would miss ya if you didn't show up!

    Lazy-Bones- You should know me well enough now to know I love to make Qui stupid at least in the beginning. Although I think right now for him he's almsot rational!!


    Mel_J I think the only reason for Jinn to even consider swapping his son for his nephew is because he blames himself for his brother's death.

    JJ_Girl and Jedi7 You are my salvation always. You always up, even if I haven't posted to keep this story from going way back on the list. I thank you for that!!!


    PEACE ewen


     
  8. Jenny_The_Jedi_Girl

    Jenny_The_Jedi_Girl Jedi Padawan star 4

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    U know i'll always be by your side ewen :)
     
  9. Jenny_The_Jedi_Girl

    Jenny_The_Jedi_Girl Jedi Padawan star 4

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    **Falls to her knees, throws her hands up in the air, as she throws her head back and screams: obiwan!!!!!!!!!
     
  10. jedi7

    jedi7 Jedi Padawan star 4

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    UP, cause I'm in the mood for some Sidious today. Feeling evil. [face_devil] ;) 7
     
  11. ewen

    ewen Jedi Padawan star 4

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    It was a stupid action done for the right reason, desperation. Master Riddon stepped away from the others and started to draw his saber. Jinn tried to stop him but he did not heed his head master?s command. He was immediately surrounded by red guards and disarmed.

    ?I guess there are a few stupid ones within your temple here Master Jinn. Better warn them of how quickly and easily I will kill. You just might find your family killed and then I will still take the boy. Now let me show you something.?

    Sidious pulled the collar of the turtleneck shirt down that Damien wore. There was a ring-like necklace. Jinn knew it was not a force inhibitor because neither his mother, nor his nephew possessed the force. There was only one thing Jinn could think of, mini bombs set to detonate probably by some control Sidious had. It was at that time that the dark one showed Jinn the little mechanism in his hand with one red button on it.

    ?That?s right Master Jinn. I couldn?t bring enough force collars however I thought I wouldn?t need all of them if I placed these bomb collars on your family. Now I would suggest you have everyone pile their sabers up over there and my men will see that are put in a safe place for you. This is going to me so much fun Qui-Gon.?

    ?How do you expect this exchange to work? What do you have planned??

    ?Now now Master Jinn don?t be in such a rush . I am certainly not. My men need to rest up. It is quite cold out there. We can all sleep on it. Yes, that?s a good idea then tomorrow you can give me your answer, once we have both rested and eaten something. Not that I didn?t appreciate the food your little one brought me. It just wasn?t enough.?

    ?Just get to it Sidious.??

    ?Oh no Jinn. Seems to me I am calling the shots right now. I want you to have some time with your son this evening in that big room there, maybe right by the fireplace and you contemplate your families? fate. Yes a little quality time with your son so you be able to make your decision on who you will save. It will be either the little one or these two here beside me.?

    ?What do you mean??

    ?Quite simple. I plan to offer the life of your mother and nephew if only you give me the child there. How?s that? Never say I?m not fair Jinn. I mean you would not have to let your nephew down like you did his father; his poor dead father.?

    The smirk of the smile that crept on the evil one?s face made Qui-Gon ill at ease and the sight alone of Sidious standing there alive as his brother lay dead, made the master ill, physically. Some one so easily could kill a child or possibly worse yet take him for servitude in the ways of the dark. It seemed incomprehensible to Jinn. However he knew with Sidious, he wouldn?t hesitate to take a child?s life to suit his purposes as he saw them. His mind was twisted by evil

    Jinn would have liked to have gone for the dark one?s throat, but he would not jeopardize his family further.

    ?Now I have instructed the cooks in the kitchen to whip up something good for last-meal. Although I am sure it will not be as savory had your mother helped in the preparation, Master Jinn. Let?s a go in and sit down and eat. I am famished and I am sure you are hungry from your long trip.?

    Sidious made it sound like a party of some kind, not a death sentence for someone in the room. That someone would be related to Jinn in some manner. He would have to make the final choice.

    Nothing Jinn had trained for up until now in his life had prepared him for what Darth Sidious asked of him. He would choose which one in his family would be spared death at the hands of the Dark Lord. The one not chosen would surely die before Jinn?s very eyes. Sidious? revenge would be complete and utterly gruesome, but somehow the dark one would love it. He had found a way to torture Qui-Gon worse than if he had been sentenced to die; for that was what this would be. His decision would be far worse than facing his own death.

    While Jinn couldn?t believe what the man asked of him; to choose between his loved ones, he remained calm.
     
  12. jedi7

    jedi7 Jedi Padawan star 4

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    Oooh I liked, Sidious wonderfully evil with plenty of arrogance and evil ultimatums. Whew now that that's out of my system ;)
    That no good SOB!!!!, does he really think Qui-gon Jinn is gonna choose between family members, and the well-being of his fellow jedi?.... I'm starting to fume now!!!!!! :mad: 7
     
  13. Jenny_The_Jedi_Girl

    Jenny_The_Jedi_Girl Jedi Padawan star 4

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    So help me if he gives up obiwan... THATS IT FOR ME :mad:
     
  14. Mel_J

    Mel_J Jedi Youngling star 1

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    Sideous should take Damian with him, the brat would do well as a Sith!

    Seriously, I love how wonderfully evil and slimy Sideous is. He knows it would hurt Qui more to chose between the two boys than any physical pain would hurt. Just so manipulative and calculating...and I can't wait to see more of him!
     
  15. JediANGELA

    JediANGELA Jedi Master star 6

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    i agree with Mel_J, Damien should go with Sideous. Don't let Obi go!

    BTW- I am working on getting my first story up. It should be up by Monday, if I get these errors straight!


     
  16. snowbee-wan kenobi

    snowbee-wan kenobi Jedi Padawan star 4

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    AHHHHH. Sidious is just awful!
    He sure knows how to make Qui suffer!
    Poor Obi too....he must be scared to death right now!!!
     
  17. jedibear30

    jedibear30 Jedi Master star 1

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    i am sorry to say that if qui-gon gives obi to sideous that i am out of here. i cannot do this right now. i hope qui does the right thing and saves his whole family. maybe help from the main temple. sorry ewen, hope this doesn't offend you. it is a good story, but i don't want the angst right now. i will check daily and read if there are no warnings, but i cant handle obi being ripped away from his father. by the way, i have my baby home from the hospital and things are slowly getting back to normal. i have my good days and bad days, but most are good. today was not. til later my friend.
     
  18. ewen

    ewen Jedi Padawan star 4

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    Sidious sent the Jinns, along with a couple of masters and knights, Riddon included, into the common room. The other knights, masters, and padawans were all congregated in the dining hall. Once there, they were allowed to eat and then make beds in the dining area for sleep.

    Sidious planned to retire for the evening. Before he went upstairs to find a room, he handed the leader of his red guard the mechanism that controlled the bombs.

    ?Now don?t hesitate to push that little red button if anyone tries anything. I think Master Jinn knows me well enough to know I will follow through with my threats. Excuse me, I plan to get some sleep. I did not sleep well in the barn last night. My men will see that you have blankets and pillows to use for sleep Master Jinn. The Jedi not in here are under guard in the dining hall, the ones here now will make their beds up in here and sleep. I hope you have time to think on your decision for we will discuss it over break-fast. Now good night.?

    Guards armed with blasters and sabers stood at the double doors of the common room. The dining hall double doors were guarded by matching red guard posted at its entrance. The leader of the dark lord?s guard sat over in a far corner at a small table with three chairs around it. Two other guards sat with him to make sure no one overpowered them and took the bomb detonator. If anyone tried anything Myra and Damien would quickly have their heads blown right off their shoulders.

    Obi-Wan had remained at his master's side the entire time Sidious talked with Qui-Gon. After he left Obi was still unwilling to leave his master. Talking though was out of the question for the little one.

    As soon as Sidious left Myra and Damien both ran to their protector, Qui-Gon and started talking at the same time. Jinn could not even keep up with what they were saying.

    Little Obi was literally shoved out of the way by Jinn?s bomb-wired relatives.

    "Well I hope you see now what mistake it was to keep the child. Look what he has done.?

    ?Mother please!!! I do not have the time to go into Obi-Wan?s mistakes right now. Yes I agree he has greatly compromised the safety of not only you and Damien but everyone of the Jedi I am responsible for, himself included. Nevertheless now is not the time to delve in and discuss Obi-Wan's mistakes, tragic as they are.?

    Could his father have lain any more guilt on him for the demise of all at the temple? Obi-Wan had tried to remain in very close proximity to his master even when his Grandmother and cousin first attempted to physically push the child from his father. However, now he wasn?t so enthused with even being in the room with his father let alone beside him. The small Jedi slinked back in the group around his master and finally found a little corner by the fireplace to sit.

    ?Qui-Gon what do you plan to do??

    One simple question with an impossible answer for Qui-Gon.

    The master looked over at the guards in the corner, engrossed in their own conversation. He noticed one would occasionally look over to see what the group was doing then would quickly go back to their own devices. None of them seemed worried about the Jedi. They had the detonator to the bomb in their possession. That was their safety.

    Master Riddon had been one of the masters who stood around Master Jinn as he welcomed his family with opened arms. He did take the time to see Obi in the corner but he really didn?t have the time to find out what his problem was.

    Maybe he is just exhausted from the day?s traumatic events and has found a place that is warm and quiet.

    Jinn hoped Obi fell asleep there. He would care for his son later.

    In a low quiet voice he instructed the others to slowly break up and then one at a time wander over to the sleep couch against the far wall.

    ?We will be able to better discuss our plan from there. Mother, you and Damien stay here in front of the fireplace and rest. I want Master Riddon, Knight Blen?Lek and Master Delonos over with me. I may have a plan or least a partial plan. I can ge
     
  19. jedi7

    jedi7 Jedi Padawan star 4

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    Your not seriously gonna do what I think your gonna do, are you,ewen? I am confident that you will rectify the situation later, or my recently honed saber skills will be put to good use. 7 [face_devil] ;)
     
  20. Jenny_The_Jedi_Girl

    Jenny_The_Jedi_Girl Jedi Padawan star 4

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    SO HELP ME EWEN IF YOU MAKE QUIGON GIVE UP OBIWAN I'M GOING TO BE SOOO MAD AT YOU, I WILL USE MY SABER ON YOU!!!!!! ;)

    Ohh did someone say something about mutiny.. hmmmmm i like that idea!!!
     
  21. ewen

    ewen Jedi Padawan star 4

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    AYE!!! I see the sabers are thrown and the lines are waiting to be crossed.

    I just put a metal shield plate on to protect my heart, or I might find it cut out!!

    PEACE ewen
     
  22. Mel_J

    Mel_J Jedi Youngling star 1

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    I'm starting to wonder who is the most evil in this story- Sideous, Qui-Gon's dispicable mother or Qui-Gon himself for even trying to heap blame on his poor little son.

    Still, if Qui-Gon betrays Obi and hands him over then even if he tries to get him back, I hope the boy doesn't forgive so easily. He's been hurt so much that he would be better off with Mace or Yoda back at the main Temple.
     
  23. Kelly Kenobi

    Kelly Kenobi Jedi Padawan star 4

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    No Mel_J I believe the evil one with this story is ewen!!!!!!!!

    So help me if Qui-Gon doesn't do the right thing here I will never forgive him :mad:

    Then I believe the man still owes our sweet little Obi an apology for the abuse he inflicted on Obi at first, for that is exactly what it was abuse.
     
  24. snowbee-wan kenobi

    snowbee-wan kenobi Jedi Padawan star 4

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    Uh ewen...I'm sorry I must be blind. Did I read ur last post right? Cuz I sure thought you made it sound like Qui was gonna give up Obi....
    He couldn't possibly do that now could he ewen? C'mon you wouldn't do that to your loyal readers!!!!

    GREAT POST THOUGH! Qui deserves getting the cold shoulder from Obi right now!
     
  25. ewen

    ewen Jedi Padawan star 4

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    Receiving forgiveness from one once that person thinks you betrayed him would be very hard to get.

    You guys will want to come back tomorrow and read the next post.

    I am glad no one knows what city I live in.

    Before anyone asks,NO I am not posting until tomorrow!!!

    PEACE ewen
     
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