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Saga - PT A Private Place (MMM #8; Zeb/OC romance; pre-Rebels)

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction- Before, Saga, and Beyond' started by Findswoman, Feb 10, 2020.

  1. Findswoman

    Findswoman Force Ghost star 5

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    Feb 27, 2014
    Author: Findswoman
    Title: A Private Place
    Era: Saga–PT (pre-Siege of Lasan)
    Characters: Garazeb “Zeb” Orrelios, OC, and a few cameos
    Genre: Romantic vignette, mush
    Summary: Zeb surprises Shulma with a visit to her private study chamber at the Royal Lasat Academy of Shamans.
    Notes: Written for MMM Challenge #8: KISS. The prompt was to write a story featuring a kiss in 1000 words or less. According to www.wordcounter.net, this one clocks in at 965 words (962 if the three-asterisk separator isn’t counted). Many thanks to @Raissa Baiard, as always, for beta reading and invaluable feedback. @};-


    Zeb always got lost in the Academy of Shamans.

    Not that he’d actually been inside the place much. Most of the time, when he came to meet Shulma, it was at the funicular station at the foot of the mountain. But this wasn’t just any other time. He wanted this time to be extra special, because he had just returned from his first big tour of duty—stealth operations training at Honor Guard Station Wyddb out on the Western Landmass. Not only had he completed the training with distinction, he had also been promoted from First Corporal to Junior Lieutenant in the process—and he wanted her to be the first to know. She knew he would be returning that day, but she didn’t know he was on his way to her study chamber right now.

    It had taken a while, but he thought he was finally in the right place. Shulma always said that the second-degree shamans’ study chambers were on the west side, but that wasn’t much help. The Royal Lasat Academy of Shamans was vast, labyrinthine, and confusing. Zeb had already taken one wrong turn through the faculty-only section of the library (where a grizzled older male shaman had shot him a stern glare) and another through the initiates’ wing (where some of the younger initiates, unused to seeing a hulking, armored military man lumbering through their hallowed halls, had stared and pointed).

    But an Honor Guard must persevere, of course. And persevere he did, scouring the ancient corridors of the academy until he came to a hallway of small cubicle-rooms, each with its own window and door and with names on some of the doors. Now it was just a matter of finding hers. (As he walked, he slipped off his bracers and knuckle guards and secured them to one of his belt clips. He had a feeling he wouldn’t want them in the way.)

    Ah, there it was: SHULMA VIZULI TRILASHA 2D ORDINARY. He peered through the window. There she was! Anything but ordinary, if you asked him! Sitting at her wooden desk, with her long, dark hair tumbling over her shoulders, engrossed in a large, ancient-looking book. Sometimes she paused to peer into another smaller book lying open beside it; sometimes she took notes in a small notebook. He watched her for several moments. Each of her little studying motions—peering, craning, jotting, bending over to pick up a dropped stylus—was full of her characteristic grace, the grace he loved. And she was all alone, studying her texts and her lore here in her own little private place, with no one else around to see… and Zeb wondered if someday he would be watching her graceful motions in other private places, too…

    Arright, head out of the clouds, Orrelios. As slowly and as quietly as he could, Zeb turned the handle of the door and opened it, then toe-padded into the room toward Shulma. She took no notice, still engrossed in her studying. Zeb smiled to himself as he sidled soundlessly over to stand behind her. Looked like stealth ops training was paying off already! He put out a hand—careful now, stealthy now—and laid it, very gently, on that lithe, wine-striped shoulder…

    “Oh!” A few sparks flew upward as Shulma sprang to her feet and spun around, dropping her stylus and knocking the notebook to the floor. She sighed with relief as she realized who was there, and relaxed against his chest. “Zeblove, you’re here…!”

    “Heh heh, ’course I am, darlin’!” He grinned as he gathered her close. “Did I scare ya?”

    “Yes—I mean, no—I mean, a little, but—what are you—doing here?”

    “What’s it look like? Holdin’ my lady, of course.” In her own little private place, all alone, so close… “Since I haven’t gotten to since the start o’ last cold season’r so.”

    “Mmm, well, usually you’re holding your lady out there on the transport platform.”

    “Yeah, but this is nicer… nicer and more private and we’re closer and…” And you’re so beautiful and so soft and I can feel your breath on my nose—“aw karabast, it’s been a really long time, hasn’t it, darlin’—”

    “Oh Zeblove, it has”—closer—“it has”—closer still—

    They kissed.

    And kissed and kissed AND KISSED, those mouths and stripes and scents that had been so long apart—passionately, forcefully, lingeringly—her hands tenacious on his shoulders and chest, his hands rugged on her waist and hips—fused and locked as one, and yet moving and thrilling—AW YEAH—

    All in that little private place, all alone, so close…

    They did not see the pair of bright, mischievous amber eyes that peered in through the window, then darted off—then returned with several other bright eyes that also began to peer in. Nor did they see the fallen notebook on the ground behind them—

    —until they both stumbled backward over it and into the corner of the desk. Shulma’s gasped cry broke their kiss as she and Zeb tumbled onto the desk in a heap, knocking the larger book closed and jostling the smaller book to the floor. There was barely time for a karabast before they became aware of the gawking eyes, the gasps, the cheers…

    …and a diminutive but commanding figure swept through the hallway, scattering the gawkers with a stroke of her hand and calling out, “NOW THEN, DEAR CHILDREN, BACK TO YOUR STUDIES, PLEASE!”

    And Shulma and Zeb sagged against each other, spent but relieved.

    * * *​

    That was the first and last time Zeb ventured up to Shulma’s study chamber. Next time he came to meet her at the academy, he stayed at the funicular station and waited for her—and the next time, and the next time. Their kisses there were calmer, mellower. But neither of them ever forgot that passionate, forceful kiss in that private place.

    Honor Guard Station Wyddb is fanon and is named after Naval Air Station Whidbey on Whidbey Island, one of the islands off the Olympic Peninsula of the state of Washington (and my dad’s birthplace).

    Shulma Vizuli Trilasha 2d Ordinary: “Second Ordinary” is a reference to her rank as a shaman; it represents that she is at about the midpoint of her shamanic studies. Shulma’s middle name was first introduced in Sparks.

    The amber eyes belong to another OC of mine: Yhazi Khefastu, Shulma’s fellow shaman and one of her best friends (albeit one with a mischievous streak). She is first mentioned in Sleeping Honor and has appeared in person in Calm after the Storm and Light of Lasan.

    The “diminutive but commanding figure” is, of course, none other than the one and only Chava the Wise.
     
  2. WarmNyota_SweetAyesha

    WarmNyota_SweetAyesha Game Host Who Loves Fanfics & RPGs star 7 VIP - Game Host

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    Aug 31, 2004
    DELICIOUS! DELICIOUS! Particularly:

    They kissed.
    And kissed and kissed AND KISSED, those mouths and stripes and scents that had been so long apart—passionately, forcefully, lingeringly—her hands tenacious on his shoulders and chest, his hands rugged on her waist and hips—fused and locked as one, and yet moving and thrilling— (Melty!)

    [face_laugh] for Yhazi and the group of gawking cheering spectators. ;)
    A super-fine addition to the delight that is Garashul...

    P.S. Thanks for introducing another OTP mash-up, Wraz [face_laugh]
     
    Kahara, Raissa Baiard and Findswoman like this.
  3. Mira_Jade

    Mira_Jade The Fanfic Manager With The Cape star 5 Staff Member Manager

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    Jun 29, 2004
    Oh dear goodness me, but this definitely took the K.I.S.S prompt and ran with it in the best of ways. What a kiss! What a beautifully described scene for Zeb and Shulma! I found myself smiling at this all the way through. :D

    First off, I loved the setting! It looks like Zeb is putting all of his skills as an Honor Guard to the best - he certainly did earn that promotion, didn't he? [face_mischief] - from his perseverance through the labyrinthine halls of the academy to his stealthily sneaking into Shulma's room. I enjoyed all of the details of him finding his way and, of course, his thoughts on his lady love all the while! (And the sparks, of course, the sparks!! [face_love])

    Aw! It was a little detail, but so sweetly sincere. [face_love]

    And what a kiss that was!!! :D [face_sigh][face_love] So much passion and warmth! And, of course, so very clearly from Zeb's POV. :p

    Oh but I lost it here! Yep, our lovely couple attracted company! [face_laugh] [face_tee_hee] But it's well meaning company who are just sincerely happy for their joy. I love that Wise Chava knows what's what, though, and ushers her students on their way. :p


    What a lovely scene to answer to the challenge - and a beautiful memory for both Zeb and Shulma! [face_love]

    =D= [:D]
     
    Last edited: Feb 10, 2020
  4. Kit'

    Kit' Manager Emeritus star 5 VIP - Former Mod/RSA

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    Oct 30, 1999
    I don't know if I would call the place private...;)[face_laugh] Especially with so many watching eyes.

    I think meeting down at the bottom of a mountain is a much better idea, unless, that is, one likes kissing in front of an appreciative audience [face_love]
     
  5. Raissa Baiard

    Raissa Baiard Chosen One star 4

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    Nov 22, 1999
    Aww...squeeeee! Zeb is such a dear here, coming to surprise Shulma on his return from training. As always, I love how you turn Zeb into a romantic leading man in a way that’s perfectly in character with the somewhat curmudgeonly Rebel we see later in his life. He’s got the Serious Honor Guard side that’s all about perseverance in finding Shulma’s study and the playful, prankish side that decides it would be a good idea to try out his stealth training on his beloved :p (He’s lucky Shulma is so even-tempered; I would have screamed bloody murder if he snuck up on me like that and ended any chance of private kisses right there). I love the image of him wandering the Academy halls, getting shushed by scholars and stared at by initiates (who, I’m sure, giggled up a storm after he was gone at the fact a handsome soldier appeared out of nowhere!) And I love this
    A nice pun and a sweet sentiment rolled into one [face_love]

    Luckily, Shulma doesn’t spark too much when Zeb surprises her, at least not until they realize they’re alone and it’s been such a loooong time since they’ve seen each other...and kissed each other... And then sparks of a different kind fly as they make up for all that lost time, kissing like you can only kiss when you’re Young and In Love, and they get so caught up in the moment that a dozen banthas with banners saying “Eat at Dex’s” could have paraded by and they wouldn’t have noticed, never mind a couple of nosy shamans (It would have to be Yhazi; I can only imagine how much she must have teased Shulma afterwards!) And they don’t notice that notebook, either, until...d’oh... Knowing Shulma it was probably that much more mortifying that Chava happened by at that moment, too. I really don’t blame them for meeting at the funicular station after all that! But they still have the memory of that exciting, passionate,and (almost) private moment to cheer them...and spark hopes for future moments [face_love] :*
     
  6. devilinthedetails

    devilinthedetails Jedi Grand Master star 4

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    Jun 19, 2019
    Nice job with this piece! It felt like a slice of life story that was very true to life in a galaxy far, far away. Particular highlights for me were:

    And kissed and kissed AND KISSED, those mouths and stripes and scents that had been so long apart—passionately, forcefully, lingeringly—her hands tenacious on his shoulders and chest, his hands rugged on her waist and hips—fused and locked as one, and yet moving and thrilling—AW YEAH—

    All in that little private place, all alone, so close…

    This just has a wonderfully stream of consciousness feel to it that I loved.

    Also:

    …and a diminutive but commanding figure swept through the hallway, scattering the gawkers with a stroke of her hand and calling out, “NOW THEN, DEAR CHILDREN, BACK TO YOUR STUDIES, PLEASE!”

    This part just made me chuckle to myself. You have a knack for writing that kind of true to life humor.

    Great job with this, and thank you for writing it! It's really cool to see all the different takes on kissing as a result of this Monday Mush Challenge:D
     
  7. JediMaster_Jen

    JediMaster_Jen Jedi Grand Master star 4

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    Jun 3, 2002
    Not so private a place afterall. [face_laugh] Beautiful imagery, especially when Zeb sees Shulma for the first time in a while. I think you captured their connection perfectly. =D=
     
  8. divapilot

    divapilot Force Ghost star 4

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    Nov 30, 2005
    Zeb and Shulma - always searching for each other! Zeb won't give up on her.
    No labyrinth of hallways will deter this Honor Guard from finding his sweet love!

    You know, I really like this. Every motion she makes, every little gesture is special to her. She moves with unplanned grace. Her beauty is so natural and such a part of her that she isn't aware of how even the most insignificant actions she performs is entrancing to him. And someday, maybe, he will be the object of those graceful motions; those devotions will be for him alone.

    uh oh. Little eyes are peering at them! I can imagine all the little curious kits snooping through the window at the two lovers.[face_tee_hee]

    Such a sweet moment between the two!
     
  9. RX_Sith

    RX_Sith C&G Game Host star 5 VIP - Game Host

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    Mar 13, 2006
    I really love the chemistry that is displayed between Zeb and Shulma who definitely make up for missed time and then some. ;)